Many studies have found sucralose to be perfectly safe for people to consume. And it is useful for people who are trying to lose weight. The reading’s arguments against using sucralose can all be changed.
First, about sucralose affecting the thymus. If you look closely at the studies of sucralose consumption, there were no effects on the rats at all until they were eating extremely large quantities of sucralose. In order for a human to eat the equivalent amounts that affected the rats being studied, a human would have to consume about 4000 packets of sucralose per day for a month.
Second, sure, some organ chlorines are toxic. If they are consumed, they are digested and stored in fat tissue, and they continue to build up in the fat tissues till they reach toxic levels. But studies show sucralose is a bit different from the other organ chlorines. Sucralose is not absorbed by the digestive system very well and so it does not accumulate in the body’s fat tissue. Since sucralose is not absorbed well by the digestive system and doesn’t build up to dangerous levels in fat tissue, it is unlikely to have the toxic effect that the other organ chlorines do.
Finally, there is the argument that many people who use artificial sweeteners in their drinks end up eating lots of real sugar in food like cake, and so they negate the benefits of using the sweetener. Well, that argument may hold true for many artificial sweeteners but sucralose has a unique property that makes it different. Most artificial sweeteners break down if they are heated too much, but sucralose does not break down when heated. That means that unlike other sweeteners, sucralose can be used to bake things, like cakes and cookies, for example. People craving something sweet can turn to cakes or cookies baked with sucralose, which helps them keep their diets on track.
The lecturer challenges the topic proposed in the reading that it is not clear whether sucralose actually helps people lose weight. And he thinks that many studies show that sucralose is perfectly safe and useful for people to lose weight.
First, the passage indicates that sucralose consumption caused shrinking of thymus in rats. However, the professor points out that sucralose has no effects on rats at all. rats must eat a large quantities of sucralose to harm the immune system and human must also consume much sucralose per day for a month to obtain that harmful effect.
Second, the article supposes that sucralose is created by replacing some of the atoms in natural sugar molecules with chlorine. But the lecturer supports that most organochlorines are digested and absorbed in fat tissue whereas sucralose is different. sucralose cannot be absorbed through digest system very well, so it cannot accumulate in fat tissue to build up to a dangerous level. Thus, it is not similar with other organochlorines which have toxic effects.
Third, the essay suggests that substituting artificial sweeteners for real sugar often does not help people lose weight. Nevertheless, the professor argues that sucralose has unique property because it does not break down due to too much heat. Hence, it is used to bake things such as cookies and cakes which is sweet to help people keep their diet on the track.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Rats
...ucralose has no effects on rats at all. rats must eat a large quantities of sucralos...
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Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'quantity'?
Suggestion: quantity
...s on rats at all. rats must eat a large quantities of sucralose to harm the immune system ...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... that sucralose is created by replacing some of the atoms in natural sugar molecules with c...
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Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sucralose
... tissue whereas sucralose is different. sucralose cannot be absorbed through digest syste...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, third, thus, well, whereas, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1181.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 232.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09051724138 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62726036535 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.8327505756 49.2860985944 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.4166666667 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06452816374 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38614604294 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130273807999 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108723103905 0.0662205650399 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224781398906 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118464577817 0.0443174109184 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.