Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage.
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. Reducing Costs First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another. Preventing Errors Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error. Aiding Research Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The lecturer challenges the topic proposed in the reading that storing patient's medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. And she thinks these benefits created by using electronic databases are uncertain.
First, the passage indicates that the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. However, the professor points out that costs cannot be significantly reduced and there won't be any savings on storages. In that most of doctors use these paper records as emergency backup or patients' signatures are used in some legal situations, doctors do not throw them away. so they still have to pay extra storages for paper records.
Second, the essay supposes that electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. But the lecturer supports that most doctors still use pen and paper for prescription and they often take notes by hand. so when stuff enter the document file of the electronic system, they still have to interpret doctors' writing, which would also cause errors. Thus, electronic medical records would not considerably reduce the chances of medical errors.
Third, the article presumes that electronic medical records can greatly adi medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. Nevertheless, the professor argues that electronic medical records may not benefit medical research. it is still difficult to use patients' medical information because it is subjected to some strict privacy laws in the U.S. Many strict procedures must be followed and patients' permission should be obtained to get the their medical information and sometimes the permission is not granted now that patients could block the access to their medical data if they want.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the doctors') or simply say ''most doctors''.
Suggestion: most of the doctors; most doctors
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ations, doctors do not throw them away. so they still have to pay extra storages f...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...tion and they often take notes by hand. so when stuff enter the document file of t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...cords may not benefit medical research. it is still difficult to use patients medi...
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Line 7, column 483, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...ts permission should be obtained to get the their medical information and sometimes the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43793103448 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63660322679 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551724137931 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.2702849229 49.2860985944 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.307692308 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203225438793 0.272083759551 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077732358417 0.0996497079465 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454687830053 0.0662205650399 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129937779726 0.162205337803 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256060492088 0.0443174109184 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.2367328918 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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