Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage.
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. Reducing Costs First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another. Preventing Errors Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error. Aiding Research Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The points made in the lecture debunks the notions that adopting electronic medical record systems have benefits of reducing cost, preventing errors, and aiding researches. Each of these benefits suggested by the reading is discussed and scrutinized in the lecture, showing that electronic medical record systems may actually be much less promising compared to the picture drawn in the passage.
To begin with, the lecturer indicated that using the electronic system does not actually reduce costs. She supported this viewpoint by showing that doctors using electronic systems still keeps paper copies of records as backups and for legal purposes. Therefore, the costs of maintaining and managing these medical records remains virtually the same when using the electronic system. This contradicts the statement in the passage that suggests that using electronic medical record systems can reduce costs.
Furthermore, the lecture indicates that using electronic medical record systems does not help avoid errors caused by poor handwriting by doctors. In fact, doctors still write on paper when in examinations. Their handwriting on these pieces of paper were later transcribed by office staff, who will have a hard time recognizing what the doctor wrote if the doctor's handwriting was "artistic." Therefore, adopting the electronic system does not help prevent this kind of error, as the passage claims.
Finally, concerning the ability of such electronic medical record system to aid research, the lecturer doubted how much help it can provide. She holds this opinion because there are strict privacy laws that may potentially hinder the access and use of these electronic data. Many permission are needed before a researcher could access these medical records, and this often include the consent of individual patients. So, at the end of the day, these electronic records will not be of much help if the patients declined the researchers' access.
The lecture doubts the benefits of using electronic medical record systems recorded in the passage. The lecturer provided details and reasons demonstrating that these systems does not reduce costs, cannot avoid errors, and hardly aid research.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 276, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun permission seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much permission', 'a good deal of permission'.
Suggestion: Much permission; A good deal of permission
...ccess and use of these electronic data. Many permission are needed before a researcher could ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, furthermore, if, may, so, still, therefore, in fact, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1373.03311258 137% => OK
No of words: 338.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55029585799 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74373791673 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508875739645 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 419.366225166 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0578291174 49.2860985944 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.066666667 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 7.06452816374 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12312261275 0.272083759551 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558754823811 0.0996497079465 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487947332126 0.0662205650399 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855501206636 0.162205337803 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478315107622 0.0443174109184 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.2367328918 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 63.6247240618 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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