Now children do not behavior as well as the children did in the past. Which one of the following measure do you think can help children (age 5 – 10) behave better?1.Control the time they spend on TV or movie2.Take more time to chat with children.3.Monit

Both the writer and the lecturer mention about same age play groups among children.The writer states that same age group is considered better for children, however the lecturer claims otherwise by making several counterarguments.

First and foremost, the writer claims that peer groups are more preferable and contribute to forming friendships and socialize more.To be clear, peers are believed to be equals and competitors without any involvements of adults.The lecturer,conversely, encounters by making scientific-based argument that according to experiment of dividing children group consisted of 11 boys coming from same backgrounds with no courage of racing caused them to be competitive unintentionally and tease each other instead of socializing and building friendships.

Secondly,the writer states peer groups promote healthy competitiveness and gain skills to survive in competitive circumstances.The lecturer, though, fails to agree by bringing facts from the study that once the contest with a reward started, children begin demonstrate negative attitudes toward each other.

Thirdly,the writer states same age groups champion cooperation in sorting out certain problems.The lecturer, however disagrees by illustrating the children start working together only when common problem that bothers everyone on the area occurs and they cooperate to achieve certain goal.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 22.412803532 31% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1190.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 196.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.07142857143 5.08290768461 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34570970464 2.5805825403 130% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.673469387755 0.540411800872 125% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 21.2450331126 231% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.454724074 49.2860985944 246% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 297.5 110.228320801 270% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.0 21.698381199 226% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.25 7.06452816374 258% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130754077142 0.272083759551 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861977939114 0.0996497079465 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336441330403 0.0662205650399 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861977939114 0.162205337803 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336441330403 0.0443174109184 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.7 13.3589403974 237% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 4.82 53.8541721854 9% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.8 11.0289183223 225% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 18.81 12.2367328918 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.14 8.42419426049 132% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 10.7273730684 284% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.6 10.498013245 206% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.2008830022 277% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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