Now children do not behavior as well as the children did in the past. Which one of the following measure do you think can help children (age 5 – 10) behave better?
1. Control the time they spend on TV or movie
2. Take more time to chat with children.
3. Monitor the interaction between children and their peers.
Nowadays, parents have a concern about the behaviors of their kids because most parents are an employee and usually, they have not free time to teach correct behaviors to their babies. Therefore, children probably get some behaviors from their environment. Physiologists believed that children in low age tent to be friends with kids that are of the same age, so most of their time to spend with their peers. Well, in my opinion, parents if want to have a healthy baby, should examine the interaction of their baby with his/her friends. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, sometimes children have friends who have not a good ethic, so this relationship can be harmful to children because when a kid is age 5 – 10, they have a fresh mind that can easily understand everything that happens in their environment. Therefore, after a while, children can imitate peers behaviors that it is not very good for their future, consequently, parents must check the interaction between children and their peers. For instance, I remember that, when I was 7, I had a friend that he was a bad boy and everyone knew this issue, but unfortunately I could not understand this issue. One day he told me that one of our classmates has a beautiful pencil that we can pick up it. I loved this work because I thought this work is cool, so we did. After days, I explained the action to my father and he punished me because I caused my classmate to cry for days. As a result, my parents have decided to screen my friend, actually they since that time they have selected my friend that is very bad for me.
Secondly, usually, children became a team to fight with other groups of kids, actually, they want to show their powers and this event has seriousness effects for children. Researchers, states that children in low age like to experience action things such as battling because they think that in this way, they can prove their physical power, but this behavior is every wrong. As a result, experts suggest that the best way to correct children's behaviors is by monitoring the interaction with their friends.
To sum up, taking all the reasons and examples into account, I believe that children receive some things from their friends because children prefer to spend their days with close friends. Thus, children should learn to choose a friend that he/she has good properties.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79856115108 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60505838898 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498800959233 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5167957974 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.705882353 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254206055164 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957390181692 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682024216319 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182631563176 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281917458925 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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