Parents have a many responsibilities to word their kids. Father and mother are first teacher for their children. they take in their account to teach them how to face all parts of their life correctly. Whether, it is beneficial to motivate young kids to take a part-time career or not. This can be weighed in different aspects. In my perspective, I concur with statemen, Taking part time work in the beginning bof teenager is a paramount factor to successes in the future.
First, and foremost, part time job have a crucial advantages. It will participate to widen kids scope. When kids work a few hours weekly, they will get a lot of experiences. Therefore, this will be enable them to be familiar with different things. This is an example from my real live. When my son sixteen years old, he worked in a restaurant as a casher. At the beginning, he did a couple mistakes like gave a customer different order, or when account money to return exchange. With the time, he can overcome these problems. Furthermore, he learn a lot about customer service. In addition, after he graduated from high school and attend collage, He had opportunity to apply for better position in other place which is related to his major in collage. According to his previous experience, he was accepted in new career . As a result, we can figure out importance of working a part time job in early stage of life.
Moreover, when kids work in part time job, this will help them to be responsible. This is due to the fact that, they will be aware about importance of managing their budget. Furthermore, they will be learn to be organize. It is important for youngster to organizes their time between studies, work, and take brake to enjoy themselves with type of entertainment. Hence, they also know how to take care about themselves and become independent.
In conclusion, I strongly agree, that young kids should be encourage to take part time job. they become responsible and independent. Furthermore, they broaden their horizon with a tremendous knowledge that will help them in future.
Parents have a many responsibilities to word their kids. Father and mother are first teacher for their children. they take in their account to teach them how to face all parts of their life correctly. Whether, it is beneficial to motivate young kids to take a part-time career or not. This can be weighed in different aspects. In my perspective, I concur with statemen, Taking part time work in the beginning of teenager is a paramount factor to successes in the future.
First, and foremost, part time job have a crucial advantages. It will participate to widen kids scope. When kids work a few hours weekly, they will get a lot of experiences. Therefore, this will enable them to be familiar with different things. This is an example from my real live. When my son sixteen years old, he worked in a restaurant as a casher. At the beginning, he did a couple mistakes like gave a customer different order, or when account money to return exchange. With the time, he can overcome these problems. Furthermore, he learn a lot about customer service. In addition, after he graduated from high school and attend collage, He had opportunity to apply for better position in other place which is related to his major in collage. According to his previous experience, he was accepted in new career . As a result, we can figure out importance of working a part time job in early stage of life.
Moreover, when kids work in part time job, this will help them to be responsible. This is due to the fact that, they will be aware about importance of managing their budget. Furthermore, they will be learn to be organize. It is important for youngster to organize their time between studies, work, and take brake to enjoy themselves with type of entertainment. Hence, they also know how to take care about themselves and become independent.
In conclusion, I strongly agree, that young kids should be encourage to take part time job. they become responsible and independent. Furthermore, they broaden their horizon with a tremendous knowledge that will help them in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: They
...r are first teacher for their children. they take in their account to teach them how...
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Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
...pective, I concur with statemen, Taking part time work in the beginning of teenager is a ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unt factor to successes in the future. First, and foremost, part time job have ...
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Line 2, column 24, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
... in the future. First, and foremost, part time job have a crucial advantages. It will ...
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Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'advantage'?
Suggestion: advantage
... foremost, part time job have a crucial advantages. It will participate to widen kids scop...
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Line 2, column 541, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...vercome these problems. Furthermore, he learn a lot about customer service. In additi...
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Line 2, column 818, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...xperience, he was accepted in new career . As a result, we can figure out importan...
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Line 2, column 876, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
... can figure out importance of working a part time job in early stage of life. Moreove...
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Suggestion:
... part time job in early stage of life. Moreover, when kids work in part time jo...
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Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: part-time
...f life. Moreover, when kids work in part time job, this will help them to be responsi...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ut themselves and become independent. In conclusion, I strongly agree, that yo...
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Line 4, column 62, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'encouraged'?
Suggestion: encouraged
...rongly agree, that young kids should be encourage to take part time job. they become resp...
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Line 4, column 72, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'taking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: taking
...ee, that young kids should be encourage to take part time job. they become responsible ...
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Line 4, column 80, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... young kids should be encourage to take part time job. they become responsible and indepe...
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Line 4, column 95, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...uld be encourage to take part time job. they become responsible and independent. Fur...
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Line 4, column 181, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'tremendous knowledge'.
Suggestion: tremendous knowledge
...ermore, they broaden their horizon with a tremendous knowledge that will help them in future.
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Line 4, column 224, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...remendous knowledge that will help them in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 22.412803532 210% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 30.3222958057 181% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 354.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82203389831 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81273494688 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 145.348785872 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545197740113 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 419.366225166 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 3.25607064018 768% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 13.0662251656 199% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0134849694 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.6538461538 110.228320801 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.6153846154 21.698381199 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88461538462 7.06452816374 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 4.19205298013 406% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378047897298 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110845363924 0.0996497079465 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143359615826 0.0662205650399 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294861763583 0.162205337803 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.229101538523 0.0443174109184 517% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 13.3589403974 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 53.8541721854 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 12.2367328918 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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