TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO 11

Both the reading and the lecture talk about the reasons that litterature books have been less popular among people and it caused the cultural problems. Although the author states some explanations the results of being dicsonnected to litterature books and decline of culture, the lecturer finds them dubious and provides three counter reasons to refute them all.
First, the reading explains that the lack of intellectual stimulation and imagination is one of the results of abandoning reading novels and poems. On the other hand, based on the lecture, a book should not be a litterature one neccassrily to stimulate the creativity or people's intellectual activity. History books, political analyses and other well-written challenging books can have the same effect on people's mind and culture.
Second, the author claims that people are more attracted by television and online reading which has decreased the level of culture. In contrast, the lecture opposes this notion by stating that the ways of expressing culture has changed a lot recently and there are numerous forms of indicating the culrtural behaviors which can directly point to the concern and meaning.
Third, the author states that the lower number of litterature readers have caused gifted writers to be disappointed about flourishing their talents. However, the lecturer asserts that maybe it's not the readers fault that the litterature writers have faced serious problems about their published books. According to the lecture, some contemporary novels are so difficult to understand that no body likes to pursue them. Thus, there is no reason that earlier generations may have read these poor-written novels.

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Average: 8.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 190, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...owever, the lecturer asserts that maybe its not the readers fault that the litterat...
^^^
Line 4, column 389, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'nobody'?
Suggestion: nobody
...els are so difficult to understand that no body likes to pursue them. Thus, there is no...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, third, thus, well, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 262.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41603053435 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75078589297 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583969465649 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2592569491 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200319729419 0.272083759551 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824006782458 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575289655196 0.0662205650399 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121523690289 0.162205337803 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293540930806 0.0443174109184 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.7273730684 144% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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