TPO-04 - Integrated Writing Task Endotherms are animals such as modern birds and mammals that keep their body temperatures constant. For instance, humans are endotherms and maintain an internal temperature of 37°C, no matter whether the environment is wa

keeping body temperature in a constant degree is an important characteristic of modern birds and mammals called Endotherms. according to the reading, dinosaurs were not in endotherms category but they could be able to control their body temperature. The lecturer clearly disagrees with the proposed hypothesis and refutes each of author's reason by giving some evidence related to dinosaurs.

First, the reading states that fossils found in the polar region are a good evidence for the proposed idea. because only endotherms can tolerate in this kind of cold regions which are so active. On the contrary. the lecturer contradicts the idea that these fossils cannot support the mentioned hypothesis. because the weather has been enough warm at that time. with decreasing temperature, dinosaurs cannot migrate like other animals to other areas.

Second, the reading posits that allendotherms legs are positioned under there bodies that have made the opportunity of running and high movements. Although the dinosaur's legs were like endotherms, their large size and high weight would be an obstacle against their activity.

Third, the reading says that the existence of Haversian canals that are the main characteristic of endotherms helps animals to grow rapidly. the lecturer not only validates the existence of these canals in dinosaurs, he also says that there are other growth rings that are the important part of dinosaurs. But, this evidence cannot support the mentioned idea because the growth rate in endotherms is constant whether the weather is hot or cold. In the other hand, the dinosaurs' growth stops in cooler periods.

In conclusion, the notion that dinosaurs are endotherms seems to be impossible due to soma reasons mentioned above.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rn birds and mammals called Endotherms. according to the reading, dinosaurs were not in e...
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... a good evidence for the proposed idea. because only endotherms can tolerate in this ki...
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Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... a good evidence for the proposed idea. because only endotherms can tolerate in this ki...
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...annot support the mentioned hypothesis. because the weather has been enough warm at tha...
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Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...annot support the mentioned hypothesis. because the weather has been enough warm at tha...
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...ther has been enough warm at that time. with decreasing temperature, dinosaurs canno...
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...dotherms helps animals to grow rapidly. the lecturer not only validates the existen...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dinosaurs'' or 'dinosaur's'?
Suggestion: dinosaurs'; dinosaur's
... is hot or cold. In the other hand, the dinosaurs growth stops in cooler periods. In ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, third, in conclusion, kind of, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 275.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39272727273 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73377648763 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8134813922 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6875 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 7.06452816374 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37538340071 0.272083759551 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102355466076 0.0996497079465 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641233226558 0.0662205650399 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189559359493 0.162205337803 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421917047249 0.0443174109184 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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