tpo 1 integrated writing

Both passage and lecture argue about the new idea of reducing employees work time from five days per week to four days per week. the passage claim that this new method results in increasing workers lifestyle ans is beneficial for them, however, the professor disagrees with it. the main reasons in the reading and its corresponding contradiction opinion mentioned in the passage, has been provided as follow.

first, the author alleged that reducing working time, increasing employees'rest and lesuire time. and also, it can increase the hireing rate to compensate for the difference between amount of work done by four-days and five days working. On the other hand, the professor believes that, four day working led to increasing company cost, because hiring more workers required more medical and health cost for each individual newly employed worker, and also increasing number of workers attributie the more number of working supplement, computer, desk, etc, for instance.

second, it has been mentioned in the passage that, decreasing the working hour will increase workers joy of life and provide them more leisure time to do their work, however. as quted in the lecture, this may increase the employer expectation and make them ask the workers to perform and done the same work defined in five days in the four days, which harm workers health condition and make working atmosphere unpleasant to them. moreover, it would decrease the rate of employing as managements and company owners intendent and prefer to pay low to their employees and recuirte less workers, further in some jobs, like manager it is necessary that the worker present at the position constantly and two people for this kind of jobs is not favorable.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ve days per week to four days per week. the passage claim that this new method resu...
^^^
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...t this new method results in increasing workers lifestyle ans is beneficial for them, h...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 399, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...ioned in the passage, has been provided as follow. first, the author alleged that redu...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...assage, has been provided as follow. first, the author alleged that reducing worki...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...reasing employeesrest and lesuire time. and also, it can increase the hireing rate ...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
... computer, desk, etc, for instance. second, it has been mentioned in the passage t...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...leisure time to do their work, however. as quted in the lecture, this may increase...
^^
Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
... working atmosphere unpleasant to them. moreover, it would decrease the rate of employin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 579, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...pay low to their employees and recuirte less workers, further in some jobs, like man...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, for instance, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 282.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14184397163 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57261133052 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58865248227 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.9364402871 49.2860985944 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.111111111 110.228320801 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 21.698381199 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8888888889 7.06452816374 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.3589403974 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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