TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The article discusses the negative consequences of selling and buying important fossils to private collectors. However, the professor explains that these drawbacks are exaggerated and their are many advaantages from trading in fossils. She refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading states that private collectors who are puchasing fossils will not allow public to view their collections, So the public will deprive.
The professor opposes this point by explaining that these colections that owned by provates are high exposure to the public such as universities and other public who interested in ancient fossils.

Second, the articles claims that scientists will lose their access to those unique fossils, therefore, miss out important discoveries. On the other hand, the professor states that this reason are so un realistic. She describes the process of evaluating and purchasing collections are only done by specalize people. Those are scientistics and expertises, So by default fossil collections are examined and tested first by scientists to value them.

Third, the article avers that because of private colectors are untrained, uninterested to how handle fossils carefully, those fossils may be faced damage , and even destroyted. However, the professor contradict this point by pointing out because of those collectors, now we have a large number of fossils. She emphaisez that without the money that provide by those collectors for buying fossils , universities and public wouldn't be able to make all thesse discoveries. FInally, she raises a question that which one is better finding fossils without owing a data like location, or remain undiscover.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...hat these drawbacks are exaggerated and their are many advaantages from trading in fo...
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Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... reading states that private collectors who are puchasing fossils will not allow public...
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Line 8, column 154, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...fully, those fossils may be faced damage , and even destroyted. However, the profe...
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Line 8, column 280, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ecause of those collectors, now we have a large number of fossils. She emphaisez that without th...
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Line 8, column 396, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e by those collectors for buying fossils , universities and public wouldnt be able...
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Line 8, column 423, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...uying fossils , universities and public wouldnt be able to make all thesse discoveries....
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Line 8, column 550, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch one is better finding fossils without owing a data like location, or remain un...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, may, second, so, therefore, third, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.578125 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86681298129 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5859375 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3375620366 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.846153846 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06452816374 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357428469294 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115599076756 0.0996497079465 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862324093218 0.0662205650399 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185879655148 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724017643114 0.0443174109184 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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