TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The reading passage describes some drawbacks in selling rare and important fossils to private collectors. But the lecturer thinks that there is alot of advantages that can be mentioned in this idea which is very important.
First, the reading passage thinks that by selling rare fossils to private collectors, most people miss the oppoutunity to view fossils in public places like museums. But the lecturer thinks that some little organizations like schools and universities can buy some of these fossils to investigate and also view them to public.
Second, the reading passage thinks that some scientists will miss the opportunities to investigate these fossils. Because private collectors arenot willing to give these fossils to scientists. But the lecturer thinks that the value of fossils indentified by detail examination by experts and scientists. Hence, this will give the time to experts to investigate these fossils.
Third, The reading passage thinks that commercial fossil collectors destroy some valuable information about position and smaller fossils around the bigger one. But the lecturer thinks that universities can completely discover places that located around big fossils to find more fossils.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... in this idea which is very important. First, the reading passage thinks that b...
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...estigate and also view them to public. Second, the reading passage thinks that ...
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...rtunities to investigate these fossils. Because private collectors arenot willing to gi...
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... experts to investigate these fossils. Third, The reading passage thinks that c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1033.0 1373.03311258 75% => OK
No of words: 185.0 270.72406181 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58378378378 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 4.04702891845 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75265195193 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 145.348785872 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 315.0 419.366225166 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0766793593 49.2860985944 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357730405356 0.272083759551 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165418725056 0.0996497079465 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093282745015 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243984698655 0.162205337803 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711596989557 0.0443174109184 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.8541721854 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 63.6247240618 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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