TPO-15 - Integrated Writing Task The cane toad is a large (1.8 kg) amphibian species native to Central and South America. It was deliberately introduced to Australia in 1935 with the expectation that it would protect farmers' crops by eating harmful insec

The reading states that the huge increased population of cane toad threatens small native animals of Australia and proposes several measures to stop this catastrophic. On the other hand, the professor completely disagrees with author's solutions and says that these solutions not only are unsuccessful, but also harm environment.

To begin with, the reading comes up with the idea building a national fence to prevent spread of the toads. The reading refers to the time that national fence prevented the spread of rabbits in the early part of the twentieth. However, the professor refutes that by mentions rivers carrying young toads and their eggs beyond fences.

In addition, the reading says that the toads could be captured and destroyed by volunteers. Author suggests that government should organize a campaign to overcome this situation. But, the professor says that amateur volunteers who are not trained, may kill some frog species and harm echo system.

Last but not least, the reading states that by spreading special kind of virus which only effect cane toads, they can overcome this catastrophic. On the other hand, the professor immediately refutes this solution by saying that how badly this idea could affect environment. she says that this virus can effect original habitants, such as reptiles which are transformed to America by pet collectors, as a consequence, American echo system may be effected.

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Average: 6.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...dly this idea could affect environment. she says that this virus can effect origina...
^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'may', 'so', 'in addition', 'kind of', 'such as', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272 0.261695866417 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.14 0.158904122519 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.092 0.0723426182421 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.04 0.0435111971325 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.012 0.0277247811725 43% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12 0.128828473217 93% => OK
Participles: 0.036 0.0370669169778 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68815415521 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.024 0.0208969081088 115% => OK
Particles: 0.004 0.00154638098197 259% => OK
Determiners: 0.12 0.128158765124 94% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.028 0.0158828679856 176% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.02 0.0114777025283 174% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1424.0 1645.83664459 87% => OK
No of words: 226.0 271.125827815 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.30088495575 6.08160592843 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.04852973271 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384955752212 0.374372842146 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.305309734513 0.287516216867 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225663716814 0.187439937562 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.141592920354 0.113142543107 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68815415521 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579646017699 0.539623497131 107% => OK
Word variations: 56.545882918 53.8517498576 105% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0529801325 84% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5454545455 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2627611223 49.3711431718 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.454545455 132.220823453 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.909090909091 0.878197800319 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 51.0764279968 50.5018328374 101% => OK
Elegance: 2.22916666667 1.90840788429 117% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.636759716124 0.549887131256 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118599037106 0.142949733639 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.113085629397 0.0787303798458 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.621630192919 0.631733273073 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122777736798 0.139662658121 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.289788639462 0.266732575781 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143920679846 0.103435571967 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.34606193292 0.414875509568 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0327997463869 0.0530846634433 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.438003350947 0.40443939384 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101609915031 0.0528353158467 192% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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threatens small native animals of Australia
threatens small native animals in Australia

to prevent spread of the toads.
to prevent the spread of the toads.

rivers carrying young toads and their eggs beyond fences.
rivers are carrying young toads and their eggs beyond fences.

this virus can effect original habitants
this virus can affect original habitants

American echo system may be effected.
American's echo system can be affected.

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Words: 226 250

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 12
No. of Words: 226 250
No. of Characters: 1165 1200
No. of Different Words: 129 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.877 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.155 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.566 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.677 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.653 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4

thank you for your evaluation , I have some questions.
"this virus can effect original habitants " what is wrong with this?
"rivers carrying young toads and their eggs beyond fences." In this sentence I meant "rivers which are carying young toads and..." , isn't it correct if I eliminate "which are" in a sentences?

1. 'effect' means 'a change that is a result or consequence of an action or other cause.'. it is a noun. so:

this virus can affect original habitants

2. yes, you can do that. but look at the whole sentence:

the professor refutes that by mentions rivers carrying young toads and their eggs beyond fences.

'by mentions' here is not for verbs. So we are expecting a verb after 'rivers'