TPO 17 Integrated writing

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TPO 17 Integrated writing

In this set of materials the article posits that increase in human activities such as agriculture, are harming the wildlife, specially the birds. In this regard it provides three reasons of support and the author claims that this growth will decrease the birds in number. However, the lecturer raises questions on the ideas and presents some evidence to refute them all.

First, the author of the reading passage states that human settlements destroy the birds' habitat. In the contrast, the professor refute this point by saying that these settlements can create a better and larger environment for birds. According to the professor, many people are complaining about the birds in the cities. Although few kind of birds which loose habitat, the wide range of birds have a good chance for living in the towns.

The next explanation which is uttered in the article is that assigning more lands for agriculture will cause the destruction of the birds' habitats, like forests. On contrast, the lecturer explains that nowadays less and less lands are using for agriculture. She mentions that with inventing the new crops, there is no need for using the vast areas because farmers can harvest more crops on less land.

Finally, the author of the article claims that chemical pesticides which being used for agriculture, have negative effects on the birds. Conversely, the speaker explains that people are aware of the terrible consequences of these chemical pesticides and they invented two possible solutions to handle this problem. Using less harmful pesticides and planting better crops, are the perfect ways which human can address for this trouble.

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the article posits that increase in human activities such as agriculture, are harming the wildlife
the article posits that the increases ... are harming the wildlife

Although few kind of birds which loose habitat,
Although a few kind of birds lose the habitats,

chemical pesticides which being used for agriculture, have negative effects
chemical pesticides which are being used for agriculture, have negative effects

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 267 350
No. of Characters: 1350 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.042 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.056 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.439 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.199 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5