TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

The writer is upset and he is arguing that because of human population and use of pesticides has caused harm to wildlife particularly bird.But speaker has mentioned some of his opinion to contradict writer's view and make it inaccurate when compared to what happened in real.

First,writer has mentioned that due to human population and urbanization birds are declining day by day.But speaker says that its true to some extent but many other birds such as pigeons,hawks etc are increasing in numbers.It is believed that populations of birds is shrinking but they are not totally declining.This directly contradicts what the passage indicates.

Second,due to expand of agricultural land wildlife and birds population are decreasing as the reading passage states,but speaker contradicted the point by saying united states has a very few agricultural land and wilderness and it hasn't affect the birds.

Third,the reading passage states that due to use of chemicals and pesticides in the past it has affected the wildlife and birds.But speaker says that nowadays people are more conscious and they are aware of result of using pesticides so the passage is inaccurate and wrong as it tells birds population is decreasing due to use of pesticides.This is another part where where experienced contradicted theory.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The writer is upset and he is arguing that because of human populatio...
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Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The writer is upset and he is arguing that because of human population and use...
^^
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on and use of pesticides has caused harm to wildlife particularly bird.But speake...
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Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...sed harm to wildlife particularly bird.But speaker has mentioned some of his opini...
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Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , writer
...pared to what happened in real. First,writer has mentioned that due to human populat...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...nization birds are declining day by day.But speaker says that its true to some exte...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , hawks
...ent but many other birds such as pigeons,hawks etc are increasing in numbers.It is bel...
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Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ons,hawks etc are increasing in numbers.It is believed that populations of birds i...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...king but they are not totally declining.This directly contradicts what the passage i...
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Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , due
...ts what the passage indicates. Second,due to expand of agricultural land wildlife...
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Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...decreasing as the reading passage states,but speaker contradicted the point by sayin...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...agricultural land and wilderness and it hasnt affect the birds. Third,the reading ...
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Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... and it hasnt affect the birds. Third,the reading passage states that due to use ...
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Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
... it has affected the wildlife and birds.But speaker says that nowadays people are m...
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Line 7, column 342, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... is decreasing due to use of pesticides.This is another part where where experienced...
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Line 7, column 363, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: where
... use of pesticides.This is another part where where experienced contradicted theory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, third, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1108.0 1373.03311258 81% => OK
No of words: 207.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35265700483 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10136650152 2.5805825403 120% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536231884058 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 21.2450331126 240% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.259537422 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 277.0 110.228320801 251% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.75 21.698381199 238% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 4.19205298013 382% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290920689841 0.272083759551 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181253784046 0.0996497079465 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0165985295385 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181253784046 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165985295385 0.0443174109184 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.6 13.3589403974 222% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.25 53.8541721854 21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 5.55761589404 286% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 11.0289183223 221% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.64 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.42419426049 122% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 10.7273730684 280% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.498013245 213% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.2008830022 268% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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