TPO-23 - Integrated Writing Task Populations of the yellow cedar, a species of tree that is common in northwestern North America, have been steadily declining for more than a century now, since about 1880. Scientists have advanced several hypotheses expla

The passage is mainly about the declination of yellow cedar tress and scientists has given different hypothesis for its declination however speakers find out some in accurate point when compared to what happen in real.

First,writer has mentioned that declination of yellow cedars is mainly by the parasites and insects present in the tree but speaker contradicted the point and says bark of cedar trees is saturated and poisonous and how can they affect in declination?

Second,as per the writer brown beers are the cause of cedar declination because its bark is being claws by the beers ans also by the animals aggressive feeding habit is another cause but there were no beers in the island to claws and to eat its bark as per the speaker.This is another point where we can experience contradicted theory

Third,due to climate change cedars tree's roots are being affected.But if the climate is responsible for declination why other trees in cold climate does not dies it's the question raised by the speaker to contradicted the point of the writer.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , writer
...ompared to what happen in real. First,writer has mentioned that declination of yello...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...n they affect in declination? Second,as per the writer brown beers are the caus...
^^^
Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beers'' or 'beer's'?
Suggestion: beers'; beer's
... because its bark is being claws by the beers ans also by the animals aggressive feed...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... and to eat its bark as per the speaker.This is another point where we can experienc...
^^^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , due
... experience contradicted theory Third,due to climate change cedars trees roots ar...
^^^^
Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...e cedars trees roots are being affected.But if the climate is responsible for decli...
^^^
Line 7, column 158, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'die'
Suggestion: die
...hy other trees in cold climate does not dies its the question raised by the speaker ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...her trees in cold climate does not dies its the question raised by the speaker to c...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 1373.03311258 64% => OK
No of words: 176.0 270.72406181 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01704545455 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 4.04702891845 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77011217028 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 145.348785872 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556818181818 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 419.366225166 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 13.0662251656 23% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 58.0 21.2450331126 273% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 163.158409733 49.2860985944 331% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 294.333333333 110.228320801 267% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 58.6666666667 21.698381199 270% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.0 7.06452816374 226% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293914509397 0.272083759551 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197494904432 0.0996497079465 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448788936084 0.0662205650399 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181661626215 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454160613141 0.0443174109184 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.5 13.3589403974 236% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 21.07 53.8541721854 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.7 11.0289183223 224% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 63.6247240618 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.7273730684 186% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.2 10.498013245 240% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 25.0 11.2008830022 223% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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