TPO-21 - Integrated Writing Task Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, g

The passage is mainly about genetic modification on tress.Writer has mentioned many advantages about the modified trees.Genetic modification is generally used to change character of organism's.But there are not only benefits this process cause some problems which are mentioned below.

First,genetically modified tress are harder than other tress.He has given one example of papaya's tree which is modified and its helps to end the ring spot problem,gives more food,fruits and other products which helps farmer to get their return faster.But speakers has contradicted the point as such modified plants is easily affected by climate change and it may be destroy by the pesticides.

Further,modified trees helps to prevent over exploitation of wild trees and it also helps to recover in those places where trees are being cut down today.It also helps to satisfy demand for woods as per the writer but modified trees hampers growth of other trees.Farmers has to plant those trees by paying for its seeds as per the speakers.This is another part where we experience contradicted theory.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Writer
...nly about genetic modification on tress.Writer has mentioned many advantages about the...
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Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Genetic
...any advantages about the modified trees.Genetic modification is generally used to chang...
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Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...y used to change character of organisms.But there are not only benefits this proces...
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Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , genetically
...lems which are mentioned below. First,genetically modified tress are harder than other tr...
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Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...ified tress are harder than other tress.He has given one example of papayas tree w...
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Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , gives
...d its helps to end the ring spot problem,gives more food,fruits and other products whi...
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Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , fruits
...nd the ring spot problem,gives more food,fruits and other products which helps farmer t...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...helps farmer to get their return faster.But speakers has contradicted the point as ...
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Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , modified
...be destroy by the pesticides. Further,modified trees helps to prevent over exploitatio...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...es where trees are being cut down today.It also helps to satisfy demand for woods ...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Farmers
...ied trees hampers growth of other trees.Farmers has to plant those trees by paying for ...
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Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...aying for its seeds as per the speakers.This is another part where we experience con...
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Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...here we experience contradicted theory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 917.0 1373.03311258 67% => OK
No of words: 170.0 270.72406181 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39411764706 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 4.04702891845 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10646719093 2.5805825403 120% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647058823529 0.540411800872 120% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 419.366225166 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 13.0662251656 23% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 21.2450331126 264% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6304225438 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 305.666666667 110.228320801 277% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.6666666667 21.698381199 261% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06452816374 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438540387598 0.272083759551 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.265684765379 0.0996497079465 267% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688126618919 0.0662205650399 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265684765379 0.162205337803 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688126618919 0.0443174109184 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.3 13.3589403974 242% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.64 53.8541721854 27% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 11.0289183223 228% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.87 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.42419426049 125% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 10.7273730684 280% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.4 10.498013245 232% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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