Tpo 20.

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Both the reading and the lecture discuss about the little ice age. Whereas, the reading explains some reasons that perhaps, are the causes of this period, the listener disagrees. He thinks that the data used in the reading is out of date, also scientists have new evidences that cast doubt on the reading.

In the first place, the reading claims that the period of ''the little ice age'' occurred due to ocean disruptions. Because of this, the cooling rose and the countries around the world froze. But, the listener doesn't agree, he considers that if Golf Stream happen only Europe, America, and some part of Africa could have been affected, not the entire world.

Second, the reading states that volcanic eruptions could have been responsible for the period of cooling. It says that dust could have blocked the sun and due to this temperature decreased. Contrary, the listener has another position, he accepted the fact that a huge volcanic eruption would reduce the amounts of light reaching the earth, but this fact require visual evidences from people. For instance, changes in color of the sun and sky should be obvious.

Finally, the reading says that another possible explanation could have been a decreased in human population, and also, the trees exaggerated withdrew of carbon dioxide. Nevertheless, the listening doesn't support this point, he claims that in order to develop the carbon dioxide phenomenon, human population should be absented for many years. This was not the case, because human rose and became normal in number quick, So the system didn't has time to develop.

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if Golf Stream happen only Europe, America, and some part of Africa could have been affected, not the entire world.
if Golf Stream happens, only Europe, America, and some part of Africa could have been affected, not the entire world.

but this fact require visual evidences from people.
but this fact requires visual evidences from people.

could have been a decreased in human population
could have been a decrease in human's population

So the system didn't has time to develop.
So the system didn't have time to develop.

Sentence: Finally, the reading says that another possible explanation could have been a decreased in human population, and also, the trees exaggerated withdrew of carbon dioxide.
Description: A verb, past participle is not usually followed by a verb, past tense
Suggestion: Refer to exaggerated and withdrew

became normal in number quick,
became normal in number quickly,

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 266 250
No. of Characters: 1281 1200
No. of Different Words: 148 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.039 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.816 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.301 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.405 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4