TPO-21 - Integrated Writing Task Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees through genetic modification. It is possible to create trees that produce more fruit, g

Both the reading and the lecturer present their point of view in Genetically modified organism.While, the reading mentions three main points,supported by physical evidences,the lecture casts doubt on all of them and finds all the rejecting ideas.
Firstly, the reading suggests that GM trees are producted to overcome the only one challenge,such as: climate or insect or disease,etc. They can against it and be better at rising than the other without modified genetics. In the contrast, the normal trees will be survival because of their diversity.
Secondly,deminishing the manufacturing cost,that is stated by the passage.However, the hidden cost opposes the money the farmers save.One of them is reproducing.With traditional agriculture,they can use original seeds of this crop to grow for the next one.In the refluting case,the GMO company sell the GM seeds,the farmers have to buy them with more expensive cost.
Last,the promising application of the GMO,that adapt to the exigency of natural woods. The forests are grown faster,that makes a short circle. The professor claims that the GM trees with their strong properties properly affect the wild trees.This one of diversity has to make a big deal with the ecosystem.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 1373.03311258 76% => OK
No of words: 191.0 270.72406181 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43979057592 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36579589423 2.5805825403 130% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.680628272251 0.540411800872 126% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 419.366225166 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.2292169676 49.2860985944 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 129.875 110.228320801 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 4.19205298013 429% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224023375601 0.272083759551 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880091641249 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483029556077 0.0662205650399 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115675458742 0.162205337803 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569709942958 0.0443174109184 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.2367328918 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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