TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently
The reading and the lecture are both about the Tyrannosaurus rex. The author of the reading believes that T. rex might have still the remains of actual tissues of the animal. However, the lecturer casts doubts about the claims made in the article and refutes all the theories presented in the reading passage.
First of all, the author points out that by analyzing the leg of the dinosaur, it shows that there are hollow spaces in it which blood vessels are located. The author mentioned they also found out that soft, flexible substances are also inside the blood vessels. The point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that the soft tissues in the bone channels are not the remains of blood vessels of the T. Rex. Further, He argues that when dinosaurs died, bacteria will engulf the hollow spaces in bones, thus, traces of soft tissues will not be apparent.
Secondly, the author contends that microscopic examination shows presence of red blood cells. The article notes that this spheres has iron containing material which is necessary in the production of red blood cells. Nevertheless, the lecturer rebuts this argument. He suggests that the iron filled substance they found was only identical to other primitive animals. He elaborates on this by mentioning that small amount of red blood cells are not usually originated from T. Rex.
Finally, the author states that it contained collagen. The articles establishes that collagen can be also be seen in biochemical material that is associated with bone tissues. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that it is impossible to see collagen in animal which is 100 years old. Moreover, He puts forth the idea that traces of collagen that was found on the dinosaur must be from scientist who handle the bones of these species
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...red blood cells. The article notes that this spheres has iron containing material wh...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...heres has iron containing material which is necessary in the production of red bl...
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Line 7, column 69, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'establish'.
Suggestion: establish
...hat it contained collagen. The articles establishes that collagen can be also be seen in bi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 301.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94684385382 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4827613959 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518272425249 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2626308348 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7222222222 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7222222222 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419505757388 0.272083759551 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115265446634 0.0996497079465 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827815311853 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219243157056 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686098719549 0.0443174109184 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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