TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

Reading and lecture is about the authenticity of blood vessels, red blood cells and
collagen matrix. Reading asserts that these evidences suggest that original tissue of
dinosaurs. While, lecture thinks that points made in reading are not cogent to come to that
conclusion, he gave following reasons for his opinion:

First, reading implies that when fossils of T rex were examined researchers found out
small branching hollow channels and they contain small organic substance. Therefore, reading evidenced
that might be remnants of old blood cells. In contrast, lecture suggests that organic matter in and moisture
in the bones might be due to bacterial reaction. As a consequence, he witnessed that there is no possibility for residual
blood vessels in the fossil.

Second, reading states that researchers also discovered spheres which is analogous to red blood cells.
In addition, iron content in those cells strengthen that possibility. In contrary, lecture thinks that those
spheres might be just reddish cells because many primitive animals lack red blood cells. As a result, the argument
about the red blood cells can not be true.

Third, reading claims that fossils contained collagen matrix in the leg bone, that solidify
the statement that might be remains of T rex bone. However, lecture argues this statement made in reading,
he affirms that collagen would remain active for about hundred years. In contradiction, these fossils were about 700 million
years old, that might not be collagen of T rex bone. Instead, professor put forth that scientists might shed their skin
while analyzing the fossils and that might be the possible source of collagen. Thus, professor casts doubt on the statement made in the lecture.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...vidences suggest that original tissue of dinosaurs. While, lecture thinks that po...
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...n reading are not cogent to come to that conclusion, he gave following reasons fo...
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... rex were examined researchers found out small branching hollow channels and they...
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... substance. Therefore, reading evidenced that might be remnants of old blood cell...
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.... In contrary, lecture thinks that those spheres might be just reddish cells beca...
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...d blood cells. As a result, the argument about the red blood cells can not be tru...
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...en matrix in the leg bone, that solidify the statement that might be remains of T...
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...e argues this statement made in reading, he affirms that collagen would remain ac...
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... collagen would remain active for about hundred years. In contradiction, these fossils ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40217391304 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55784527753 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.1246232356 49.2860985944 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.09492273731 440% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39837177183 0.272083759551 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139892323618 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908436807078 0.0662205650399 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131792479809 0.162205337803 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763699635281 0.0443174109184 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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