tpo 256

Essay topics: tpo 256

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The material discusses if the vessels that were found in Iraq a long time ago could be used as electric batteries. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective, the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.

Firstly, the reading details specific points regarding this topic; namely, these vessels could not be used as batteries because of the absence of wires or other conductors. In addition to that, these vessels are similar to specific cylinders, which were used to hold scrolls. Finally, ancient people did not have any purpose for using electricity.

Conversely, the lecture challenges the points, one specific contradiction is these vessels were discovered by a group of local people, so there might be other materials attached to the vessels, but since those people were not trained archaeologists, they might not recognize the importance of these materials. Next, the vessels are similar to cylinders that hold scrolls, so they might be manufactured to preserve scrolls; however, they discovered that they could produce energy with specific liquid later, so they might be originated to a certain purpose then they could be adapted to another purpose. One final point, ancient people could use electricity to convince others that they had magical power; furthermore, they could use electricity for healing, such as relaxing muscles or relieve pain. Nowadays, people could use electricity for the same purpose.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nufactured to preserve scrolls; however, they discovered that they could produce ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, regarding, so, then, while, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1233.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 229.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38427947598 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74429742569 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56768558952 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 419.366225166 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.3521391315 49.2860985944 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0 110.228320801 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4444444444 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5555555556 7.06452816374 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 53.8541721854 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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