TPO 30

Essay topics:

TPO 30

The main idea of both the reading and the lecture is about the warfare tools under the name of "burning mirror" that is used in the greek army. The author of the reading states that it was a myth and provides three episodes of evidence for this. The lecturer, on the other hand, challenges the claims made by the author. she is of the opinion that the reasons provided by the author not convincing, and bring up a number of contradictory point in it's rejection.

To begin with, The author argues that the greek people were not advance enough to make such a complex weapon. The article mentions that this mirror might be wide and precise to deflect sun rays to the enemy's ships. this specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. she claims that this tool could make by small pieces. Additionally, she states that they made small copper sheets and joint them precisely to made wide and parabolic mirror.

Secondly, the writer suggests that by conducted experience, this mirror needed much time, about 10 minutes, to ignite the vessels into the fire. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by asserting that this experiment applied on wood material. she elaborates on this by bringing up the point that all ships made by various materials, not only wood, so other material like peach that utilize for waterproofing purpose was susceptible to fire and fired in a second. so, after pechs are fire, the fire could transmit to other wooden section of ships.

Finally, the author posits that greek people could use the flaming arrow to make fire in the enemy's ships. Moreover, in the article, it is stated that flaming arrow and that mirror need same distance for making fire, so, the usage of this mirror was squandering of time. In contrast, the lecturer's position is that flaming arrow is old warfare tools, and the enemy could recognize that immediately. she forth the notion that burning mirror is an efficient weapon because the enemies observe the mirror and could not see its rays, so magically this mirror could make fire without any observation.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...es three episodes of evidence for this. The lecturer, on the other hand, challenges...
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Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...allenges the claims made by the author. she is of the opinion that the reasons prov...
^^^
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...o deflect sun rays to the enemys ships. this specific argument is challenged by the ...
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Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...argument is challenged by the lecturer. she claims that this tool could make by sma...
^^^
Line 5, column 241, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...is experiment applied on wood material. she elaborates on this by bringing up the p...
^^^
Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ceptible to fire and fired in a second. so, after pechs are fire, the fire could t...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...enemy could recognize that immediately. she forth the notion that burning mirror is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in contrast, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 352.0 270.72406181 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88068181818 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45514874478 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519886363636 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4666198043 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.058823529 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275088063787 0.272083759551 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878730715591 0.0996497079465 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703052046544 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167669641551 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650508172872 0.0443174109184 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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