TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task
A fossil skeleton of a Sinosauropteryx have been found in LIaoning,China in 1996 between volcanic ash, and this dinosaur fossil suggests that Sinosauropteryx had feathers because there are some pattern of lines in the skeletal bones. The article suggests that these lines are not a good evidence of feathers and brings reasons for that. On the other hand the professor strongly thinks these evidence are very strong proof for feathers.
First, the article says that the lines are some structure that were formed after the death of the animal, and maybe its skin has turned to fibers that became preserved as lines in the fossil; however, the speaker thinks the lines are not made due to decomposition because other fossils in that area also do not have evidence of decomposition, beside that fossils are very well conserved so it can not be any mistake in the examination.
Second, the article writes that these lines are an indicator of frills, an ornamental fan-shaped structure growing out of some parts of Sinosauropteryx body, but the lecturer says that frills have different chemicals from feathers, and experiments suggest that the lines have beta cartin which is an element found in feathers not in frills.
Third, in the passage we read that feathers are useful just to help the animal to fly or to regulate its internal temperature, and the lines found in the fossil are located in the tail and backbone of the animal which is irrelevant to noted functions of feathers; however, the professor says that there are other functions for feathers like some animals use it to attract the opposite sex to mate, and this is called display function. The evidence from the fossil suggests that the feathers were orange and white which are colors used for display function purpose.
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Essay evaluation report
A fossil skeleton of a Sinosauropteryx have been found
A fossil skeleton of a Sinosauropteryx has been found
the lines are some structure that were formed
the lines have some structures that were formed
Sentence: Second, the article writes that these lines are an indicator of frills, an ornamental fan-shaped structure growing out of some parts of Sinosauropteryx body, but the lecturer says that frills have different chemicals from feathers, and experiments suggest that the lines have beta cartin which is an element found in feathers not in frills.
Error: cartin Suggestion: ?
flaws:
No. of Words: 300 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 7 12
No. of Words: 300 250
No. of Characters: 1456 1200
No. of Different Words: 143 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.853 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.535 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.805 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.495 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.751 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
A fossil skeleton of a Sinosauropteryx h...
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Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , China
...osauropteryx have been found in LIaoning,China in 1996 between volcanic ash, and this ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'patterns'?
Suggestion: patterns
...ryx had feathers because there are some pattern of lines in the skeletal bones. The art...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re very strong proof for feathers. First, the article says that the lines a...
^^^
Line 4, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... lines are not made due to decomposition because other fossils in that area also ...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be any mistake in the examination. Second, the article writes that these li...
^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... found in feathers not in frills. Third, in the passage we read that feath...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01337792642 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6521549342 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501672240803 0.540411800872 93% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 42.0 21.2450331126 198% => OK
Sentence length SD: 139.601912156 49.2860985944 283% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 214.142857143 110.228320801 194% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.7142857143 21.698381199 197% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 7.06452816374 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.500823348013 0.272083759551 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.218604793947 0.0996497079465 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110961974649 0.0662205650399 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293843421344 0.162205337803 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414056061827 0.0443174109184 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.5 13.3589403974 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 53.8541721854 54% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 11.0289183223 179% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.67 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.498013245 179% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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