TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

In the given set of materials, the main topic is concentrated on whether the Sinosauropteryx had feathers. Though the author contends several reasons to oppose the pattern of fine lines is the evidence, the speaker argues that all these are strong evidences.

To begin with, the claim that these lines are formed after death is disapproved by the professor. She points out that it cannot account for there are no other animals’ decomposition. In fact, volcanic ash can make the fossils preserved well, so that they are not fibers but feathers.

Then, according to the passage, lines are more likely to be fills not feathers. However, the speaker tells us the difference of fills and feathers that is the former do not contain a special proteins which the latter contain. Thus this is a strong evidence to show the high possibility that Sinosauropteryx had feathers.

In addition, the speaker also disagrees with the third reason that Sinosauropteryx’s feather is useless, because there is other function. It is likely to be used as display like peacooks. What’s more, we have confirmed that their feathers are colorful which highly supports the reason.

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Average: 6.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'protein'?
Suggestion: protein
... is the former do not contain a special proteins which the latter contain. Thus this is ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...cial proteins which the latter contain. Thus this is a strong evidence to show the h...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, third, thus, well, in addition, in fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 989.0 1373.03311258 72% => OK
No of words: 190.0 270.72406181 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20526315789 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04502227657 2.5805825403 118% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642105263158 0.540411800872 119% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 419.366225166 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1904546835 49.2860985944 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.9090909091 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284792238816 0.272083759551 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969403180891 0.0996497079465 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411118127337 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157669562917 0.162205337803 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348164598233 0.0443174109184 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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