TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

The lecture and the reading are both about the purpose of the carved stone balls, which is a curios tupe of artifact that were very common during the Neolithic period in Scotland.

First of all, the author proposes that the holes and the many superficial grooves in the carved stone balls is the result of cords used to string them through. the lecturer points out that if these stones were weapon, they should have signs of war such as broken or damaged parts,like those found in other weapons from the same period (axes and arrows).

Second, the author suggests that because of the uniformity of their size these stones could have been used as a part of a primitive system of weight and measures. the lecturer rebuts this theory and she explains that this is not possible due to the fact that they are made of different type of stones and this led in a difference in the density and then in their weight.

Finally, the idea of the author about the social purpose of the stone balls is challeged by the lecturer, she gives two reasons, first the marks are to simple to have a social purpose and second she notes that the high ranked people used to be buried with their possesions, and no stone balls were found in tombs, neither nearby.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a curio' or simply 'curios'?
Suggestion: a curio; curios
...ose of the carved stone balls, which is a curios tupe of artifact that were very common ...
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Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...t of cords used to string them through. the lecturer points out that if these stone...
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Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , like
...s of war such as broken or damaged parts,like those found in other weapons from the s...
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Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...rimitive system of weight and measures. the lecturer rebuts this theory and she exp...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of different type of stones and this led in a difference in the density and then ...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: TO_TOO[5]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... gives two reasons, first the marks are to simple to have a social purpose and sec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1021.0 1373.03311258 74% => OK
No of words: 224.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55803571429 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1276197462 2.5805825403 82% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549107142857 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 419.366225166 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 21.2450331126 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0536150659 49.2860985944 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.166666667 110.228320801 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.3333333333 21.698381199 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06452816374 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.492692353009 0.272083759551 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223317264664 0.0996497079465 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566596656705 0.0662205650399 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266993365847 0.162205337803 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533339859782 0.0443174109184 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.3589403974 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 53.8541721854 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 63.6247240618 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.498013245 160% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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