TPO 34: integrated writing task
The main topic of both the reading passage and the lecture is about the extinction of Steller's sea cows. The author of the reading proposes three hypotheses for their extinction. However, the lecturer finds all of the hypothesis dubious and present some evidence to refute them all.
First of all, the reading passage holds the view that overhunting of cows which were a good food supply for the native population of Siberia could be a potential cause of their extinction. On the contrary, the speaker underlines the fact that those creatures were enormous and massive. They were 9 meters long and approximately 10 tons. Furthermore, the Siberian population was not large and just one cow could supply the village for one month. Hence, the assumption of overhunting is not convincing.
Furthermore, the author claims that a change in the ecosystem could disturb the food chain and lead to the extinction of sea cows. A change may have happened and led to a decline of kelps, the main food source of sea cows, which then had resulted in cows extinction. In contrast, the speaker dismisses this assertion due to the fact that that change should have been really severe in order to reduce the kelps' population also it could have affect other marine species like whales and there is no evidence to confirm this issue.
Finally, the author claims that the main cause of the extinction of sea cows was the fur trade by the Europian fur trader which hunted the cows for their furs. However, the lecturer refutes them claim by indicating that when the Europeans had arrived Siberia the population of sea cows was already declined. Therefore, something before the arrival of the European should be considered as the main cause of sea cows extinction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...extinction. However, the lecturer finds all of the hypothesis dubious and present some evi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'kelps'' or 'kelp's'?
Suggestion: kelps'; kelp's
...en really severe in order to reduce the kelps population also it could have affect ot...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 428, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the main cause of sea cows extinction.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, may, really, so, then, therefore, in contrast, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.01324503311 299% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 296.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90540540541 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56955604011 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503378378378 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9705829028 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.714285714 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06452816374 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.481630270838 0.272083759551 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151331615757 0.0996497079465 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116880327135 0.0662205650399 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267920395024 0.162205337803 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115648453288 0.0443174109184 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.