tpo 35 smart cars
The reading states that smart cars have many benefit. However, the professor disagrees and mentioned that even if smart cars coudl meet technological expectation, it is not clear to produce benefits .
Firstly, the reading sates that smart cars are safer, quicker, and less expensive.
conversely, the perofessor challenged the points. Firstly, he stated that smart cars could not reduce the number of car accidents, becasue smart cars are more tightly packed together, so accidents will pile up because they include more cars, so they will be worse. Aa a result, smart cars could not save life or even reduce number of injuries. Next, the lecturer stated that smart cars will encourage more people to drive, so number of drivers will increase in roads. Consequently, commute time could not decrease becasue of traffic conjunction. So , that could not allow people to enjoy the advantage of highly speed cars. one final point, the professor explained that smart cars could not save the drivers' money. he pointed out that the global position technique is very expensive, and smart cars need other costly technique, such as sensors, which could control the distance between a car and another one infront of it. in addition to that, repairing smart cars is more expensive than conventional ones, which could create new expenses that offset saving.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many benefits'.
Suggestion: many benefits
...The reading states that smart cars have many benefit. However, the professor disagrees and m...
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Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ion, it is not clear to produce benefits . Firstly, the reading sates that smart...
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Line 5, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Conversely
... safer, quicker, and less expensive. conversely, the perofessor challenged the points. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 548, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecrease becasue of traffic conjunction. So , that could not allow people to enjoy the adv...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 550, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rease becasue of traffic conjunction. So , that could not allow people to enjoy th...
^^
Line 5, column 626, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
...joy the advantage of highly speed cars. one final point, the professor explained th...
^^^
Line 5, column 702, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'drivers'' or 'driver's'?
Suggestion: drivers'; driver's
...ined that smart cars could not save the drivers money. he pointed out that the global p...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 717, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... cars could not save the drivers money. he pointed out that the global position te...
^^
Line 5, column 1061, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...create new expenses that offset saving.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, so, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 30.3222958057 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1129.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 218.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17889908257 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50326646109 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596330275229 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 338.4 419.366225166 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.9629718661 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0833333333 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324295522556 0.272083759551 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13771886301 0.0996497079465 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844732826701 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240450593806 0.162205337803 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027076576378 0.0443174109184 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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