TPO 37- One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp-fishing boats. When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets, they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe, and they die. Some people suggest

Both the reading passage and lecture discuss about turtle excluder device (TED), which can be used to save endangered sea turtle species from being caught by shrmp fishing boats. The author presents some criticism regarding usage of this device to protect turtles. However, the professor believes that this device can be used effectively and she challenges those criticisms by providing several counter arguments.

First of all, the author claims that, it is very rare event for a ship that catches a turtle and it would not be cost effective for shrimp catchers to incorporate TED into the nets, as many shrimp might be escaped while trying to save one turtle. By contrast, the lecturer states that there are lots of shrimp fishing boats which catches a large number of turtle every year. Therefore, if someone considers whole picture as a whole, he would definitely advocate usage of TED.

Secondly, the author presents another approach which states that, time limit should be applied and nets should be pulled up to surface after that certain time, which allows turtles to breath in air and to be released from the nets. However, the professor points out the fact that, it would be very difficult for law enforcing forces to apply that time limit to all of the boats.

Lastly, according to the passage, some larger species of turtles can not be saved using TED as the escape passage is not large enough in standard TEDs. The lecturer finds this issue dubious and asserts that it is possible to prepare TED with larger passage without effecting other features.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...s of shrimp fishing boats which catches a large number of turtle every year. Therefore, if someon...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'applying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: applying
...very difficult for law enforcing forces to apply that time limit to all of the boats. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...cing forces to apply that time limit to all of the boats. Lastly, according to the pas...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 264.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94696969697 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30565789101 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587121212121 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 21.2450331126 137% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7663278323 49.2860985944 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.111111111 110.228320801 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 21.698381199 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1111111111 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159902017784 0.272083759551 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683800244322 0.0996497079465 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060363350568 0.0662205650399 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982792573958 0.162205337803 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339806253393 0.0443174109184 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 53.8541721854 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.498013245 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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