TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The reading and the lecture both discuss the possibility of the permanent living and existence on the Venus. The author of the reading passage states that due to the extremely serious and hard condition of the Venus it is not viable to live on the surface of the Venus. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the reading and he believes that it is feasible if the station is built at the height of 50 km high form the surface of the Venus.
To begin with, the author pushes forth the idea that the atmospheric pressure at Venus's surface is too high, therefore it may crush human and the spacecraft landed on the surface. In the lecture the professor completely has different idea toward this point. He asserts that if stay at the height of 50 km from the surface the atmosphere is no more dense, it is almost equal to the earth's atmosphere pressure, and it does not damage the body of spacecraft.
Furthermore, the reading states that there is no source of water and oxygen on the surface of the Venus and bringing this sources is against the permanent presence of human. While the professor notes out that in the Venus's atmosphere some chemical substances like carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric exist which can easily be used to produce water.
Finally, the writer of the reading contends that the in the atmosphere of the Venus thick layer of clouds exist which reflect almost 60 percent of the sunlight, so generating electricity is not practical. This point is challenged by the lecturer, he thinks that by building the station on height of 50 km from surface it is possible to use sun light to make power by the solar power cells because at this level more sunlight presents. Moreover he states that the reflected lights from clouds surface would be absorbs and make more energy.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le to live on the surface of the Venus. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
^^^
Line 2, column 381, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...o more dense, it is almost equal to the earths atmosphere pressure, and it does not da...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 435, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...e at this level more sunlight presents. Moreover he states that the reflected lights fro...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44764813023 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48427672956 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.6551524981 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.909090909 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 21.698381199 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355054033088 0.272083759551 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128163102877 0.0996497079465 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470973240413 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200947544563 0.162205337803 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387844501836 0.0443174109184 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.0289183223 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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