TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

Many scientists believe that it would be possible to live in other planets. Venus is one of the planets that is candidate for permanent human presence. The reading passage indicates some reasons that permanent presence of human in Venus is impossible. The lecturer, nonetheless, throws doubt on all reasons presented in reading passage and offers some counterclaims to refute them all.
First, the author argues that atmospheric pressure on the surface of Venus is at least 90 times higher than earth. Hence, this high pressure will destroy anything on the surface of Venus. Converesely, the lecturer thinks that scientists can establish station above the surface of Venus and the pressure on the station would be equal to pressure on the earth surface.
Furthermore, the reading passage highlights that there are no water and oxygen sources on the Venus. The atmosphere of Venus made up with carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric acid. The speaker, on the contary, claims that station can use this compound to create water and oxygen for station and there is no need to transport oxygen and water to the Venus.
Finally, the reading passage points out that very little sunlight reaches the planet's surface and Venus atmosphere reflects most of the sunlight. In contrast, the lecturer thinks that the cloud on the atmosphere of Venus is not thick as the author mentioned. Additionally, the speaker claims that station can use both types of absorbed and reflected sunlight to create electricity.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...some counterclaims to refute them all. First, the author argues that atmospheri...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...qual to pressure on the earth surface. Furthermore, the reading passage highlig...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ansport oxygen and water to the Venus. Finally, the reading passage points out ...
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Line 4, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'planets'' or 'planet's'?
Suggestion: planets'; planet's
...t that very little sunlight reaches the planets surface and Venus atmosphere reflects m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, nonetheless, so, at least, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 243.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1646090535 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63190522172 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502057613169 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 387.0 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4944897409 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5384615385 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433793841402 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155800960389 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646666288493 0.0662205650399 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247694981242 0.162205337803 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541988628934 0.0443174109184 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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