tpo 42

Essay topics:

tpo 42

The material discusses the concept of prevent the glass building from injuring birds which think that glass is an open air. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective, the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading details point sin regard to this topic, namely replacing the clear glass with one-way glass. In addition to that, paint the glass with colorful stripes. One final point, using the magnetic field that steer the birds away from the glass building.
Conversely, the listening challenges the points, one specific contradiction using the one-way glass in the light can reflect as a mirror, the birds do not understand the mirror which gives the image of the sky. The birds will try to fly through the glass and will be harmed. Next, the glass which is painted with colored stripes is not a good idea, not only because the birds can see holes and try to fly through them; but also the clear glass between the stripes is too small so the room will be too dark. Finally, the birds use their magnetic sense only when they travel long distance, but in short travel they use their eyes and bright light. So magnetic field will not have much effect.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ints outlined in the reading passage. Firstly, the reading details point sin r...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he birds away from the glass building. Conversely, the listening challenges the...
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Line 3, column 694, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gnetic field will not have much effect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, if, look, so, while, in addition, in short, in regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1009.0 1373.03311258 73% => OK
No of words: 211.0 270.72406181 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78199052133 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18046565978 2.5805825403 84% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559241706161 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 282.6 419.366225166 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6961668254 49.2860985944 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.9 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4 7.06452816374 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.514410866487 0.272083759551 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.21261174296 0.0996497079465 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103913898558 0.0662205650399 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335646466392 0.162205337803 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.092472970426 0.0443174109184 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 53.8541721854 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.0289183223 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 63.6247240618 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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