TPO 42

Essay topics:

TPO 42

The reading and the following lecture are discussing the problem of using clear glass in buildings that leads to injuring birds. The writer of the passage contends that architect should take responsibility of this problem and provides three alternatives that can be used instead of clear glasses. On the contrary, the lecturer is skeptic of the practicality of these solutions and refutes them categorically.

First, the author put forth the idea of using one-way glass which is like a typical window from the interior of a building but looks like a solid surface from outdoor. Therefore, birds do not tend to fly through them. The lecturer, conversely, contends that this would not stop birds getting injured because these glasses reflect the light like a mirror. According to him, birds cannot percieve the mirror and when they, for instance, see a tree or sun on this glass, they consdier it as real ones. Hence, applying one-way glasses on building cannot prevent birds from flying through them.

Second, the writer mentions painging some patterns such as stripps containing free space between to let the light come in but prevent bird to fly through. On the other hand, the lecturer explicates that birds can precieve holes between painging. Therefore, to have glass with this function, the unpainted parts must be extremely close which causes darker rooms that is not favorable. Conclusively, this solution is not reliable.

Third, the author suggest emiting deceptive magnetic fields to keep bird away glasses. Nonetheless, the lecturer states that birds use magnetic field to navigate just for long distances, for example when flying from a cold region to warmer before spring. For short trips such as from one side of acity to another, they use eye and the brightness of the light rather than magnetic field. So using electromagnetic signals have not such a effect on stopping birds to fly through windows.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 435, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...g electromagnetic signals have not such a effect on stopping birds to fly through...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, hence, look, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, third, for example, for instance, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 314.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15923566879 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58259834106 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 145.348785872 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582802547771 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2360575079 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.25 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 7.06452816374 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.465933188651 0.272083759551 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14360521259 0.0996497079465 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722352115155 0.0662205650399 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252567430005 0.162205337803 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102698897767 0.0443174109184 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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