TPO 42 integrated Writing
The reading passage states that using glass for the building is dangerous for birds because they cannot realize it from open air, so they fly through them. Also, the reading presents three solutions to overcome the problem. However, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the ideas given in the reading.
First of all, the reading states that one solution is, replacing the glass with one-way glass which can hide the inside of the building, in result birds cannot fly through because they cannot see through it. In contrast, the professor contradicts with information presented in the reading and illustrates that one-way glass performs like a mirror, and for example, if there is a tree beside the building, the bird would see the tree through the glass too and does not understand the difference. In result, it will not prevent them flying through the glass.
Second, the reading claims that painting design of stripes will prevent birds from hitting the glass. Also, building's occupants can see through it too. On the contrary, the professor refutes the solution and makes the point that birds consider open spaces in the painting as holes, so they will try to fly right through it. Also adds that if architects try to design the free spaces as small as possible which birds could not pass through, it will be so dark in the rooms.
Third, the reading puts forward the idea that, creating a magnetic field around the building will keep away from the building. Moreover, its proof is that birds use earth's magnetic fields to determine their directions so that we can use it to diverse them. On the other hand, the professor contradicts the idea and further explains that birds use the magnetic fields exclusively for long distances, for example, to migrate from cold places to warm ones. However, for short distances like one side to another side of the city, they use only eyes and bright light, in the result, the solution will not help the problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... they will try to fly right through it. Also adds that if architects try to design t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, third, for example, in contrast, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 336.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86607142857 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30723492064 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482142857143 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9763885135 49.2860985944 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.785714286 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06452816374 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.544428018848 0.272083759551 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191467137952 0.0996497079465 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106235470445 0.0662205650399 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.334910333145 0.162205337803 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845491988941 0.0443174109184 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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