TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading passage states that there are three possible solutions to prevent bird’s injury due to colliding the glass windows. In contrary, the lecturer refutes the points and supports his own reasons.
First, the passage claims that one-way glass is a proper solution for preventing birds from hitting windows. While, the professor explains that one-way glass acts as a mirror and reflects the environment. It means that a reflection of tree or sky in the glass will seem like a real tree or sky for a bird. Therefore, a bird flying toward it will not understand the difference and will fly right into it which will cause injury to the bird.
Second, the author states that using of colorful designs on the windows can be a good solution for reduction of the damages to birds. Conversely, the lecturer opposes that by illustrating that birds will perceive openings of the designs as holes which convince the birds to fly through them which causes injuries. Also, if they would make extremely small openings then the inside of the building will be too dark which will not be comfortable for the people inside.
Third, the text posits that creating an artificial magnetic field would be a great alternative to solve the problem. However, the speaker refutes it by demonstrating that birds use the magnetic capability only when they migrate in a long distance. For example, when it flies from a cold country to warm country before winter time, it uses its internal magnetic compass. Since the compass does not work for short distance then birds cannot take the benefits in this situation. Furthermore, he adds that in short distance, birds use their eyes and brightness which means the field will not affect them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 602, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h means the field will not affect them.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, while, for example, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94137931034 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52494098776 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572413793103 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.6916700818 49.2860985944 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.357142857 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06452816374 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451042568021 0.272083759551 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142033088248 0.0996497079465 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588783425503 0.0662205650399 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242885453967 0.162205337803 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703148110841 0.0443174109184 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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