TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

In the reading, the author states that there are three ways to prevent wild birds from getting injured by the glass windows of buildings. The lecturer argues that these methods are far from effective.

The first solution mentioned by the author is to replace clear glass with one-way glass which is visible in one direction so that birds can’t see through a window. Nevertheless, the lecturer counters that the birds can’t interpret the concept of mirrors. Birds could probably view the reflections of tress and sky as the real subjects and fly directly through them.

As for the second solution suggested in the reading passage, painting colorful designs on windows, the lecturer refutes this by providing the defaults within this method. He points out that there will be several holes on the unpainted regions and birds still perceive holes as channels which can be passed through. Furthermore, in order to reduce chances of the situation mentioned-above happening, the unpainted areas must be very tiny. Consequently, people inside buildings will feel too dark.

Last, another way to prevent birds from getting hurt is the application of magnetic field. The author claims that birds are capable of sensing magnetic field on earth; hence, businesses can use electromagnetics on buildings to guide birds away. However, the lecturer argues that birds’ sense of magnetic only happen when they migrate from other city or in long distance. Thus, the application of magnetic field won’t work out when birds flying in short trips.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, nevertheless, second, so, still, thus, as for, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1310.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 247.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3036437247 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68142147832 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607287449393 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5536098251 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.769230769 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489331116071 0.272083759551 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151626304755 0.0996497079465 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100288207613 0.0662205650399 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260764595223 0.162205337803 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837328636652 0.0443174109184 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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