TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The reading and the lecture are both about glass that harms birds because they can not distinguish the clear glass from the open air. The author of the reading believes that there are three applicable methods to change the glass in a way that birds can recognize it. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. He thinks that none of them is effective and still many birds are hurt by glass.

First of all, the author claims that one-way glass, that is a kind of glass which people can see outside of the window but people out of the building can not see inside of it, can be helpful. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that not only one-way glass does not help birds to recognize it, but also since one side of the glass is mirror and reflects the sky or trees, they mistakenly fly toward them.

Secondly, the author states that using colorful patterns can be beneficial. This argument is rebutted by the lecturer. He suggests that in this case some parts of glass which have no colorful patterns are taken into account as holes by birds and they fly toward them. This solution is only applicable if colors completely cover glass that is impossible because the building will be dark.

Finally, the author mentions that using artificial magnetic field can be advantageous.
The lecturer, on the other hand, feels that it is not an efficient solution because birds only use their ability of magnetic sensation at the time of immigration and long travels. In their short flies, they just use their eyes to fly to the destination. Hence, when they do not use their ability of finding the right direct according to the earth's magnetic field, creating an artificial magnetic field around the buildings is not useful.

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Average: 8.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s in a way that birds can recognize it. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'kind of', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221556886228 0.261695866417 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.158682634731 0.158904122519 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0838323353293 0.0723426182421 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0538922155689 0.0435111971325 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0568862275449 0.0277247811725 205% => OK
Prepositions: 0.14371257485 0.128828473217 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0299401197605 0.0370669169778 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.34099772484 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0149700598802 0.0208969081088 72% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.11377245509 0.128158765124 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0239520958084 0.0158828679856 151% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0149700598802 0.0114777025283 130% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1748.0 1645.83664459 106% => OK
No of words: 307.0 271.125827815 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69381107492 6.08160592843 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.28990228013 0.374372842146 77% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.205211726384 0.287516216867 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.156351791531 0.187439937562 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0781758957655 0.113142543107 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34099772484 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511400651466 0.539623497131 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.7170751208 53.8517498576 96% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0529801325 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4666666667 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7744681823 49.3711431718 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.533333333 132.220823453 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 21.7502111507 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.866666666667 0.878197800319 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 40.9878393051 50.5018328374 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.46666666667 1.90840788429 77% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.649227499039 0.549887131256 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106649345268 0.142949733639 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.07991674056 0.0787303798458 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.62023124972 0.631733273073 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192709244666 0.139662658121 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.270526449535 0.266732575781 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977084874797 0.103435571967 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.327229085505 0.414875509568 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.138602748366 0.0530846634433 261% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.405637340975 0.40443939384 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126523178532 0.0528353158467 239% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.62251655629 166% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.2958057395 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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