TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitiv

Both the reading and the listening discuss the way that agnostids live and behave. The reading states that Agnostids live and act like athropods as they are free- swimming predator, dwelled in the sea floor, and they are parasites. However, the lecture disproves this claims and refutes each of the author's reasons.

The reading states that agnostids were free-swimming predators as they hunted small animals.This the same way that primitive athropods feed on.However, the professor claims that Athropods have well developed eye as opposed to agnostids who have poorly eye sight or even blind or any additional sense that could help them as predators ,This is to say, agnostids are not predators.

Furthermore, the reading claims that Agnostids live in the sea floor like other types of primitive othropods.In contrary.the professor opposes this point by pointing out that agnostids are unlikely to live in the sea floor because sea floor dwellers move very slowly and live in localized area,while agnostids live in large are and move pretty fast.

Finally,the reading mentions that agnostids were parasites as they living on and feeding off larger organisms.Conversely, the orator refutes this idea by stating that parasites are limited population.Whereas , Agnostids are large population,if they are parasites ,they will kill the host .Thus, Agnostids are not parasites.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... predators as they hunted small animals.This the same way that primitive athropods f...
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Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...me way that primitive athropods feed on.However, the professor claims that Athropods ha...
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Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s that Athropods have well developed eye as opposed to agnostids who have poorly ...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...as opposed to agnostids who have poorly eye sight or even blind or any additional sense ...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'eyed'.
Suggestion: eyed
...as opposed to agnostids who have poorly eye sight or even blind or any additional ...
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Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... who have poorly eye sight or even blind or any additional sense that could help ...
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Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... sense that could help them as predators ,This is to say, agnostids are not predat...
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Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: In
...like other types of primitive othropods.In contrary.the professor opposes this poi...
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Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...e very slowly and live in localized area,while agnostids live in large are and move pr...
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Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...rge are and move pretty fast. Finally,the reading mentions that agnostids were pa...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Conversely
...ing on and feeding off larger organisms.Conversely, the orator refutes this idea by statin...
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Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whereas
...g that parasites are limited population.Whereas , Agnostids are large population,if the...
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Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...parasites are limited population.Whereas , Agnostids are large population,if they ...
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Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , if
...Whereas , Agnostids are large population,if they are parasites ,they will kill the ...
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Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e large population,if they are parasites ,they will kill the host .Thus, Agnostids...
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Line 7, column 288, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y are parasites ,they will kill the host .Thus, Agnostids are not parasites.
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Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...are parasites ,they will kill the host .Thus, Agnostids are not parasites.
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Discourse Markers used:
['conversely', 'finally', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'whereas', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.266949152542 0.261695866417 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.190677966102 0.158904122519 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0677966101695 0.0723426182421 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0593220338983 0.0435111971325 136% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0296610169492 0.0277247811725 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118644067797 0.128828473217 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0338983050847 0.0370669169778 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01665102757 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0127118644068 0.0208969081088 61% => OK
Particles: 0.00847457627119 0.00154638098197 548% => OK
Determiners: 0.0974576271186 0.128158765124 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00847457627119 0.0158828679856 53% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127118644068 0.0114777025283 111% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1380.0 1645.83664459 84% => OK
No of words: 214.0 271.125827815 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.44859813084 6.08160592843 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 4.04852973271 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.383177570093 0.374372842146 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.317757009346 0.287516216867 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.233644859813 0.187439937562 125% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.200934579439 0.113142543107 178% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01665102757 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528037383178 0.539623497131 98% => OK
Word variations: 47.7223378833 53.8517498576 89% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0529801325 46% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 35.6666666667 21.7502111507 164% => OK
Sentence length SD: 126.369387995 49.3711431718 256% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 230.0 132.220823453 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.6666666667 21.7502111507 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 0.878197800319 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 3.39072847682 501% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 67.4423676012 50.5018328374 134% => OK
Elegance: 1.5 1.90840788429 79% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.574169233493 0.549887131256 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.173174475185 0.142949733639 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0659973202945 0.0787303798458 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.851330976638 0.631733273073 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161117136754 0.139662658121 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.33969006566 0.266732575781 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845794708149 0.103435571967 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.248520848159 0.414875509568 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0539452338058 0.0530846634433 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.396430035259 0.40443939384 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061290147669 0.0528353158467 116% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.62251655629 28% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Sentence: The reading states that agnostids were free-swimming predators as they hunted small animals.This the same way that primitive athropods feed on.However, the professor claims that Athropods have well developed eye as opposed to agnostids who have poorly eye sight or even blind or any additional sense that could help them as predators ,This is to say, agnostids are not predators.
Description: The tag a determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by the
Suggestion: Refer to This and the
Description: The fragment have poorly eye is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace poorly with adjective

as they living on and feeding off larger organisms.
as they are living on and feeding off larger organisms.

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2

Don't put a space before punctuation marks.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 12
No. of Words: 221 250
No. of Characters: 1130 1200
No. of Different Words: 114 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.856 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.113 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.504 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.244 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.526 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.807 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4