TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TOEFL T P O 46 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading passages discusses an interesting topic about the benefits of replace medical paper record by electronic medical records, and provides intensive information, and reasons of support. However, the lecture casts doubts on the arguments exposed by the reading passage. The lecturer thinks the advantages in the use of electronical records are not so evident as the reading passage claims and refutes every of their arguments.

First of all, the reading passages sustains that one big benefit of the use of digital platform is the reduce of storage space that big amount of paper would require. The lecturer challenges this idea explaining that usually doctors keep paper records of all their activities, as backup in case they were needed like legal requirements. Consequently, there is no big difference in saving space of storage by using electronical records.

Secondly, the reading passage states that the medical errors would be eliminated or reduced considerably by using the electronic records over the papers one. On the contrary, the lecture explains how doctors continues writing their prescription and reports by hand. Moreover, the data introduced in the electronical report is done by hand and by reading those report written, also by hand, by the doctors. Thus, the possibility of errors by mispelling or wrong typewriting still high in electronic records.

Finally, the reading passages argues that the electronic records help medical research by gathering large amount of information at a time. On the contrary, the lecturer exposes the law that protect the individual privacy, in the United States that difficult the access to information.

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Integrated TOEFL Writing

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nefit of the use of digital platform is the reduce of storage space that big amount of pap...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43846153846 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84739058369 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561538461538 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4589484323 49.2860985944 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.833333333 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 7.06452816374 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3539267768 0.272083759551 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136853837283 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110357156001 0.0662205650399 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227817548405 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281475630063 0.0443174109184 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments