The reading passage claims that medical information about patients traditionaly has been recorded and stored on papar forms. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic database has several advantages over traditional papar-based record keeping. However, the lecture casts serious dsoubt on this claim by presenting some counter arguments and examples.
First of all, she argues that papar record can keep back up patient if can help reduce cost but it is not safe. This, However, is contradict to the passage claims that the us of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and tranferring medical records. while records in the papar require a significant amount of storage space, electronic is better than papar records. In the anyway it can easily duplicate and transfer them when nessary and doctors can access the records from almost anywhere more simple and easily.
Moreover, It is noted to the passage claims that electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chenges of medical errors. in contrast, electronic records are associated with standardardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error. In contrast to the lecture clarly states that in the it is simple elimination is papar can simple by mistake . doctor can take note in papar but introduce electro doctor connot adopted.
Finally, the speakers points out that if electronic medical records have many effect but this is diffrent if doctors can access to medical is better that papar records but it is not privacy. people might can records in collect data about many permition with papar and this secure and can maintain all years. Nevertheless, the text assersts that electronic records it would be simple to draw out the nede information from the medical databases due to the database are already formitted for data collection. once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: contradicted
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Suggestion: While
...toring and tranferring medical records. while records in the papar require a signific...
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Suggestion:
... access the records from almost anywhere more simple and easily. Moreover, I...
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...ost anywhere more simple and easily. Moreover, It is noted to the passage cla...
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Suggestion: In
...reducing the chenges of medical errors. in contrast, electronic records are associ...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...st to the lecture clarly states that in the it is simple elimination is papar can simp...
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Suggestion: .
...imination is papar can simple by mistake . doctor can take note in papar but intro...
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Suggestion: Doctor
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...Finally, the speakers points out that if electronic medical records have many eff...
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Suggestion: many effects
...hat if electronic medical records have many effect but this is diffrent if doctors can acc...
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Suggestion: People
...at papar records but it is not privacy. people might can records in collect data about...
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Suggestion: Once
... already formitted for data collection. once in the electronic system, the records c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, while, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 319.0 270.72406181 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26645768025 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66246332134 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523510971787 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 419.366225166 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0134613875 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.653533184375 0.272083759551 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.257826025424 0.0996497079465 259% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134956706908 0.0662205650399 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.441841286347 0.162205337803 272% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619478464458 0.0443174109184 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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