TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

Both the passage and the lecture discuss using the electronic record for keeping the patients information in the United States. The author of the passage believes this kind of storage is more useful than the traditional paper-based recording and gives some arguments for this assertion. However, the professor in the lecture refuses all the arguments and asserts that this kind of store is not useful.
Firstly, the passage states that electronic storage reduces the costs. However, the professor challenges this assertion and believes that most of the doctors prefer to keep the paper backup. Because they should pay storage cost for electronic-based recording that is in contrast to the passage.
Second, the author of the passage makes the point about preventing errors by using the electronic document. But, the professor casts doubt on this point and illustrates that most of the doctors use their own handwriting and insert them into the electronic document. Hence, still, there will be a lot of errors in documents.
Third, the passage points out the assistance of the electronic information for the researches. However, the professor refuses to this point and states that these information has restricted privacy and many researchers cannot access the information easily. He also mentions that some patients may block their information. Therefore, it will not be useful for the researchers.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...g the electronic record for keeping the patients information in the United States. The a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 157, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...r refuses to this point and states that these information has restricted privacy and many researc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 376, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will not be useful for the researchers.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, may, second, so, still, therefore, third, in contrast, kind of, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1184.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 220.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38181818182 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8023897712 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518181818182 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4977100684 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0769230769 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9230769231 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 7.06452816374 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290480270933 0.272083759551 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106048312136 0.0996497079465 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720582052065 0.0662205650399 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181731599748 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595716031037 0.0443174109184 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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