TPO27 - Integrated TOEFL essay

In this set of materials, the lecture and passage both are discussing about migration hypothesis of dinosaurs.
The lecturer is not convinced that the dinosaurs migrated to south to save themselves from cold winters by providing three reasons for his support. On the other hand, the passage considers that dinosaurs migrated during winter.

First of all, the article states that the dinosaurs migrated to the south slope to get food because, during harsh winters plants which were the food source for them was not available in the north slope of Alaska. Whereas, the lecture states that they did not migrated to south slope to find the food. Several years ago, the temperature in the north slope was quite warmer than present. The sun used to be there for 24 hours a day this provided with plenty of plants for the dinosaurs. Even in winters the dead plants were a good source of nutrition for them. Thus they did not migrated for food. Hence the hypothesis is false.

Furthermore, according to the reading the skeletal findings of dinosaurs at single place suggest that the dinosaurs used to live in herds, that is why they support migratory hypothesis as it is one of it's phenomenon. On the contrary, the lecturer mentions that even they used to live in herds it is not necessary for them to migrate because there are certain modern day animals such as elk who live in forests in west America and do not migrate. So, as the dinosaurs live in herds they should cannot be justified.

Finally, passage claims that the dinosaurs where physically capable of traveling long distances owing to their size and speed which supports the migratory theory. The speaker however, argues that even though they were huge and fast there young ones were not capable enough to travel such long distances. The adults could not left the youth dinosaurs behind as they cannot survive on their own. So this cannot prove that they migrated.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...inosaurs. The lecturer is not convinced that the dinosaurs migrated to south to ...
^^
Line 4, column 214, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...available in the north slope of Alaska. Whereas, the lecture states that they did not m...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'migrate'
Suggestion: migrate
...s, the lecture states that they did not migrated to south slope to find the food. Severa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 560, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...re a good source of nutrition for them. Thus they did not migrated for food. Hence t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 578, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'migrate'
Suggestion: migrate
...f nutrition for them. Thus they did not migrated for food. Hence the hypothesis is false...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 597, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...m. Thus they did not migrated for food. Hence the hypothesis is false. Furthermore...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f dinosaurs at single place suggest that the dinosaurs used to live in herds, tha...
^^
Line 6, column 448, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sts in west America and do not migrate. So, as the dinosaurs live in herds they should...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 326, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'leave'
Suggestion: leave
...ch long distances. The adults could not left the youth dinosaurs behind as they cann...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, whereas, such as, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8632218845 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38308339823 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1252613725 49.2860985944 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1176470588 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3529411765 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0904092629233 0.272083759551 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325503937983 0.0996497079465 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0177394783571 0.0662205650399 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0475562618528 0.162205337803 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209957970413 0.0443174109184 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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