TOEFL T P O 13 Integrated Writing Task

In this set of materials , the reading and lecture both are discussing about ownership of fossils. The author believes that the fossils should belongs to scientific experts and museums. The lecture cast doubt on all the points mentioned in the passage. He mentions that the disadvantages mentioned in passage about ownership of fossils to rich collectors outweigh the advantages.

First of all, the writer posits that if fossils are with wealthier collectors then general public would not be able to view the fossils and will lose interest to study them. On the contrary, the speaker argues that people will have greater opportunity to view these fossils. Schools and library will display them for the public.

Furthermore, the author states that scientists will not be able to obtain ample amount of information from the fossils as they will not get assess to fossils to study them. On the other hand, the professor posits that usually after the discovery of fossil, it is first studied by a scientist to know about it's authenticity. So, they will not miss the opportunity to study the fossil or miss out any information regarding the fossil.

Finally, the passage contends that unprofessional wealthy fossil seekers will destroy valuable scientific evidence. As, they do not have much knowledge about the fossils they will overlook the important details. While, the speaker claims that even though, some details might be missed the rich people are the only source of money for such projects of excavation. Scientists and other institution do not have enough funding to work on multiple excavation projects. Thus, in fear of missing valuable information; the discovery of fossil will remain unearthed.

Votes
Average: 4.2 (5 votes)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
In this set of materials , the reading and lecture both are discus...
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Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'belong'
Suggestion: belong
...author believes that the fossils should belongs to scientific experts and museums. The ...
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Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...sils are with wealthier collectors then general public would not be able to view the fossils a...
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Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll not be able to obtain ample amount of information from the fossils as they wil...
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Line 7, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l destroy valuable scientific evidence. As, they do not have much knowledge about ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, look, regarding, so, then, thus, while, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 275.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22181818182 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68583610929 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556363636364 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5982658525 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7333333333 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425347781934 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14530191574 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856546995492 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263390596598 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496785789359 0.0443174109184 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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