TPO42: integrated writing task
In modern architecture, glass is the chief material and is being used extensively, however, as birds can not distinguish between opening area and glass a vast number of them are injured by hitting to glass. The author of the passage proposes three potential solutions to this problem, however, the lecturer rebuts these solutions and he believes they will not address the problem effectively.
First of all, the author asserts that using one-way glass can be a good solution. This kind of glass is transparent for indoor individuals but outdoor people and birds can not see the inside of the building. The lecturer, on the other hand, refutes this assertion by explaining that these glasses act just like a mirror and reflect the image of sky and trees, hence, it is possible that birds fly into them.
Secondly, the author proposes using painted glass which has a kind of design like colorful stripes and there are opening between stripes, so indoor individuals can see the outdoor but when birds see the stripes avoid hitting to the glass. By contrast, the lecturer states that these kinds of glasses would not be an appropriate solution unless the space between stripes be extremely narrow and in this case, the room would be dim.
Finally, the author mentions that since birds are capable of using the earth's magnetic field for navigation, the human can take advantage of this characteristic and equip the buildings with a strong artificial magnetic field in order to deviate the birds. The speaker, conversely, states that this solution would not be effective by explaining that birds use their ability to navigate by means of earth's magnetic field only for long-distance, for instance in migration from a cold place into a warmer place. For short distances, they use their eyes and brightness instead of the magnetic field.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 305.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01967213115 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58810044387 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527868852459 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.7009884598 49.2860985944 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.1 110.228320801 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 21.698381199 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9 7.06452816374 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.48434186598 0.272083759551 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192998829773 0.0996497079465 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826696851872 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288890540281 0.162205337803 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363912908106 0.0443174109184 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.3589403974 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 53.8541721854 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.