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In this set of material, the author and the lecturer disagree on the merit of whether American wood companies would use certification for ecologically sustainable forestry practice. In the reading passage, the writer thinks the international organization effort would not be able to reach the success in adopting this project because American citizens do not trust advertisement. Also, the certification process would raise the price of the wood products. And, since American wood companies work inside the United States and do not export their product, it is unnecessary to use the certification, and they can sell their goods to their content consumers. In contrary, the professor challenges this and presents three counterclaims against the passage proving that the reasons are skeptical. Following are briefs interpretation of this perspective.
First of all, the writer states that American community exposed to several of advertising that minimizes the value of the products. Especially, those labeled products of improved or new are not trustworthy anymore for American population; therefore, this certification of the ecological friendly project would not appreciate. However, the professor in the lecture refutes this reason. He believes that American population does not treat all advertisement in the same way. In fact, they can distinguish between the ad claims and independent concerns. Thus, they would favor the independent ecological friendly international certified companies for their products and value them more.
Secondly, the reading passage claims that the process of certification would raise the price of the wood businesses and makes the products more expensive; therefore, people would prefer purchase the cheapest uncertified products. For this, American wood companies would keep their project certified for more profit. On the other hand, the listening passage rebuffs this view. He asserts that the increment in the price would not be more than 5% and American population can value this price and pay more for distinguishing the factor behind that. Furthermore, American community values the projects that protect the environment.
Last but not the least, the reading passage argues that it right this plan of friendly certified wood companies is successful abroad and in outside the United States in foreigner countries, but it is not necessary to do that change inside the United States. Apparently, it is not convincing to develop this business in the States because no need to export the products abroad the country. Whereas the lecturer opposes this argument and proposes that if American wood companies went without certification, successful international certified companies soon would offer their environmentally friendly products inside the USA market and their higher reputation would attract the American consumers. Eventually, the ecological certified foreign companies would force American companies to mimic them to protect their profit.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 447 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes. Don't need to list reasons at the introduction.
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%). So remove some content from reading part.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 12
No. of Words: 447 250
No. of Characters: 2486 1200
No. of Different Words: 198 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.562 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.917 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 161 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 119 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.434 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.317 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re refutes this reason. He believes that American population does not treat all a...
^^
Line 4, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he United States in foreigner countries, but it is not necessary to do that chang...
^^
Line 4, column 292, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'developing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: developing
...tates. Apparently, it is not convincing to develop this business in the States because no ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, whereas, in fact, first of all, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 22.412803532 192% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 5.01324503311 339% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2539.0 1373.03311258 185% => OK
No of words: 447.0 270.72406181 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68008948546 5.08290768461 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9986325494 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 145.348785872 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456375838926 0.540411800872 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 419.366225166 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8289806072 49.2860985944 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.904761905 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 4.33554083885 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 53.8541721854 62% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.2367328918 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 63.6247240618 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.7273730684 144% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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