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Both the writer and the lecturer mention about traveling purposes and consequences.The writer states only positive consequences of traveling across the world; cultural, educational, scientific.Although, the lecturer agrees with some statements, he also adds political , economical and, occupant purposes.
Firstly, the writer claims Hemingway’s Africa expedition was only about demonstrating possibilities of adventurous traveling to people.The lecturer, however, states his trip was aimed for conquest purposes:hunting ,bringing back trophies and so on.He also adds his trip did influence people in sports.Hemingway’s trip stimulated development of sports, which are hunting, fishing.
Secondly, the writer instantiates tourists gained several benefits and expanded their knowledge about distinctive cultures, nature and etc.For instance,Darwin contributed to science by observing and studying flora and fauna of exotic places.The lecturer agrees with the statements by mentioning environmental traveling.This type of traveling is about visiting uncommonly visited locations such as African Safari.Its aim is observing the nature ,certainly not killing it.
Thirdly, the writer notes John Muir’s articles about traveling to the Us,Alaska, and India inspire people to aspire observing and preserving the nature.The lecturer supports it by exemplifying facts about tourist visits’ contributions to endangered cultures.They observe customs, traditions, ceremonies, eventually, recognize and preserve them as a distinct culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 202.0 407.700716846 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.73762376238 4.8611393121 139% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.6930768694 2.67179642975 138% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.70297029703 0.524837075471 134% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.51630824373 132% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 20.1344086022 248% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9125411097 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 340.25 100.406767564 339% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.5 20.6045352989 245% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.75 5.45110844103 454% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.6 11.7677419355 303% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -13.11 58.1214874552 -23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 6.10430107527 298% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.5 10.1575268817 271% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 22.7 10.9000537634 208% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 13.62 8.01818996416 170% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 22.0 10.002688172 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.0 10.0537634409 219% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 10.247311828 215% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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