In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society?Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society?

Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

Submitted by Justin on Wed, 09/24/2014 - 05:15

Lifestyle has undergone dramatic changes over recent couple of decades. Presently, human biengs are living longer especially in affluent countries on account of increasingly life expectancy. Here, I would like to account for effects and remedies to address this worrying concern.

There are manifold effects of this problem. First and foremost, rising life expectancy will curtail to death rate at larger extent and therefore it will lead to population explosion, a mother of every problem, in this world. Adding to it, a massive number of people is likey to be perilous for environment. For exampl...

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Sentence: Presently, human biengs are living longer especially in affluent countries on account of increasingly life expectancy.
Error: biengs Suggestion: beings

Sentence: Adding to it, a massive number of people is likey to be perilous for environment.
Error: likey Suggestion: likely

Sentence: Initially, awaring people regarding family planning could be fruitful to diminish population that will help to escape from other hazards.
Error: awaring Suggestion: awaking ?

flaws:
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.017 0.07

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 285 350
No. of Characters: 1535 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.109 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.386 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.894 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.273 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.261 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.017 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Sentence-Sentence Coherence is detected by computer rating system, but we can figure it out too:

for example, in the third paragraph, we suppose you are going to talk about 'unemployment' issues, since you write 'Further emphasizing on my point of view, unemployment may come into existence...', however, in the end of the paragraph, you are back again to 'population explosion' problem which should be addressed in the second paragraph.

When you don't focus on something in one paragraph, Sentence-Sentence Coherence will be low.

Since you talked about different things in one paragraph, the Sentence-Sentence Coherence will be low. and you can see Sentence-Text Coherence is low too:

Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.261 0.35

It is not something wrong, but it is a flaw, though it is small.