The percentage of overweight children in western sociey has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
In the modern era, there are increasing obesity problem in juveniles which is very high compare to a decade ago, because many reasons are responsible which make such situations. But, we can take some actions against this dises and overcome it as much as possible. I will put my reasons and their some solutions in my futher paragraphs.
First and foremost, the eating of junk-foods are main cause, and day by day increasing pupularity used to have fast foods because their ingrediances are making people fat and after than turn into obesity problem. Second, they are losing sports activities since smart gadgets and mass medias have been inveted. So, they have become lazy and less interest in out-doors acitivities. Furhtermore, a decade ago, most juvenils had to struggle for completing their works such as they were used to drive bicycle and walking a lot distance, from home to education place or market.
Focusing on the solutions, as a mentioned earlier, in the market, availability of the junk-foods should be avoided by young juveniles. Moreover, school and collage, the sports activities should be made compulsory in the subjects, and should be taken exam regarding their health situations. we know very well about exercise, it is important part and parcel of making
better health. So, there are lots of exercise which can help to reduce the problem of obesity.
To sum-up, the situation of the overweigh in the western nations, it is best way that avoid junk-foods and doing more and more exercise. In addition, the out-door sport activities should be added in school and collage subjects.
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Suggestion: used to driving
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Suggestion: We
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, moreover, regarding, second, so, well, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.5418719212 142% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 8.36945812808 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1207.87684729 112% => OK
No of words: 265.0 242.827586207 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08679245283 5.00649968141 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66551357531 2.71678728327 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 139.433497537 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 379.143842365 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8040103476 50.4703680194 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.692307692 104.977214359 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 20.9669160288 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.25397266985 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0259334343794 0.242375264174 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00772297432158 0.0925447433944 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0142405672889 0.071462118173 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0136086493335 0.151781067708 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0119306521702 0.0609392437508 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 12.6369458128 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.1260098522 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.9458128079 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 11.5310837438 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32886699507 106% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 55.0591133005 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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