Personal Development is the base for professionaldevelopment and advancing in one's career. To whatextent do you agree or disagree?

Over the past few decades, there has been a high degree of the ambivalence over this matter, whether personal development is the base of the better career. Whereas some people say that advancement in career depends on the individual, I sanguinely side with the earlier thoughts. This essay will further elaborate reasons to support this notion and then deduce a logical conclusion.
At the outset, there are myriads of reasons to support this notion, but one of the most compelling reason is that personal development increases one's self-confidence. In my own experience, at my workplace, the employees who focused on personal development performed better than the other. Thus, the beneficial ramification of self-development apparently can be seen.
On the contrary, skeptics conjecture that there are examples available where the people who were more focused on professional development performed better. Although it seems ostensibly veridical, these are one-sided thoughts. With proper investigation, the story looked different. Hence, it is correct to presume a preconceived notion.

To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments from both the sides, I profoundly believe that personal development is the key to success in professional development. Not only do the advantages of working on self- improvements prove its significance, but also pinpoints implications of avoiding it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 146, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... is that personal development increases ones self-confidence. In my own experience, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, look, so, then, thus, whereas, while, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 6.10837438424 33% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 8.36945812808 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 31.9359605911 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1192.0 1207.87684729 99% => OK
No of words: 210.0 242.827586207 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67619047619 5.00649968141 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.92707691288 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27217361725 2.71678728327 120% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 139.433497537 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652380952381 0.580463131201 112% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 379.143842365 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8665207004 50.4703680194 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 104.977214359 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.9669160288 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.25397266985 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185679629453 0.242375264174 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557088704243 0.0925447433944 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456101974696 0.071462118173 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098765021145 0.151781067708 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372146754534 0.0609392437508 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 12.6369458128 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 53.1260098522 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 11.5310837438 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.32886699507 117% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 55.0591133005 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.94827586207 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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