As a result of advances in medical care, average life expectancy is increasing for men and women. Do you think most people will see this as a positive development? What are the disadvantages of an ageing population for individuals and society? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.
in recent decade medical care development leads human beings become more healthy and live longer. Some people believes that medical care has positive effects on humans life and people would not suffer disease much more, but some other group of people believed this may cause overpopulation and would have its own trouble to tackle with. In my point of view growing knowledge in the field of medicine would be fantastic and helps people a lot but there should be some solution to control over population.
First and for most, in this essay we want to mention the importance of advance in medical care. For Example, in the previous century people would die because of some diseases which are not known as a serious disease in the recent years such as Bronchia or Influenza, so medical care improvement cures this kind of disease and helps people a lot.
Secondly, medical care enhancement and prevent dying people may cause overpopulation. For instance, in the past each family might have 6 or 7 children and 5 of them might die because of illness before 18. Therefore by reducing the danger of disease due to advancement in medical care the population would growth rapidly, so as a result, it might causes the shortage of food , water and welfare.
In conclusion, medical care advancement would be beneficial for human being but it might have some drawbacks in terms of controlling the population growth on earth. I believe that medical care should have improved but the population growth has to be controlled by government and educational system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.5418719212 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 6.10837438424 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 8.36945812808 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 5.94088669951 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 20.9802955665 57% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 5.75862068966 295% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1296.0 1207.87684729 107% => OK
No of words: 261.0 242.827586207 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96551724138 5.00649968141 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.92707691288 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64647802366 2.71678728327 97% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 139.433497537 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55938697318 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 379.143842365 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.6157635468 43% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6551724138 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.5024630542 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4746789085 50.4703680194 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.6 104.977214359 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1 20.9669160288 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2 7.25397266985 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208195075281 0.242375264174 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980372459033 0.0925447433944 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499472473695 0.071462118173 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138518938678 0.151781067708 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029160882749 0.0609392437508 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 12.6369458128 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 53.1260098522 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.9458128079 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 11.5310837438 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32886699507 100% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 55.0591133005 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.94827586207 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.3980295567 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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