Some people work for long hours and hard to achieve success and some give importance to free time for them. Give your opinion and discuss your views.
There are a great number of people who interpret the impact of overworking as thoroughly constructive,while others hold an opponent’s view. I am inclined to believe that spending too much time could devastate the people’s health and personal life. In this essay, I elucidate my point of view by discussing the reasons before deducing a reasonable conclusion.
First of all, it is argued that overworking would devastate the relationships because people are not able to adjust their time for their personal and social life. This is to say that as a result of working excessive overtime, people will face an uphill struggle finding time to spend with their loved ones, which might consequently lead to family breakups. A research study conducted by Yale university in 2014 has shown that while parents try to work overtime to afford their children’s expenses, it could have opposite impact, and their children might show a worrying level of anxiety and depression because of reducing the parental time.
In addition, there are a tremendous number of disease associated with overworking. This may be attributed to the fact that people will spend long hours at office, therefore, their physical activity would be enormously decreased, which could increase the risk of obesity that might eventually develop many cardiovascular diseases such as heart attack and blood pressure. The yielded by a current study has shown that the most root cause of American obesity is that they spend an average 4 hours per day in front of computer.. As these examples illustrate, the drawbacks of overworking are obvious, and people’s health and relationship could be devastatingly and enormously affected.
In conclusion, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that overworking has detrimental effects on people’s health and personal life. It is expected that individuals take cognizance of these facts and make a balance between their personal and professional life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 8.36945812808 131% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 5.94088669951 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 20.9802955665 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.75862068966 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1207.87684729 139% => OK
No of words: 309.0 242.827586207 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43042071197 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12478945364 2.71678728327 115% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 139.433497537 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585760517799 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 379.143842365 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.7838413791 50.4703680194 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.833333333 104.977214359 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.9669160288 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.25397266985 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.33497536946 112% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 6.9802955665 43% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0960903157479 0.242375264174 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.035733554793 0.0925447433944 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0248413057443 0.071462118173 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564949107348 0.151781067708 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187221738337 0.0609392437508 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 12.6369458128 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 53.1260098522 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.9458128079 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 11.5310837438 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.32886699507 114% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 55.0591133005 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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